the 5th room on the 10th floor of Lolo

[Mr. J]

The flow was on point, the word usage was on another level
kept in the same pace as some of the other writers around here
very smooth transitioning the imagery was off the hook as well
nice metaphorical usage as well, that beginner is really what sealed it
kept it moving nicely my dude...keep on writing

Watch this imagery when I tinker with your mind human
The water caresses your toes, so the sand’s of time loosen
You wouldn’t believe the nerve of the interwoven dimensional feat
The taxi driver’s last fare was a pregnant woman giving birth in the back seat
Sometimes red lights don’t matter, do you understand what I am trying to tell you?
I remember you, you forgot me, love and truth with no agenda to sell yo
^^^like that sand's of time line