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Old 08-05-2013, 10:48 AM   #6
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really though...both you muhfukaz bodied this. i aint going into no technical detail cause i didnt even read it like that, imma just give it to you howeva i felt it...

maan i was reading the first verse like 'damn son is gettin off,' & then the way you passed that shit over
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I ain't about to collapse, I'm bout to commit acts of a drowning father
Bothered, oatmeal, tell these fucking people why I'm about to hollar!
i thought that shit was tough as fuck, whole first lil verse just set that tone like a muhfuka...& Oats aint let that shit slip for a second
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the world revolves around the dollar, a dictated direction
so make the connection - "paper thin" measures how money shapes its dimensions
the Earth is flat again! we're slaves to this globalization deception
that distorts our perception; we live in a Mercator projection
^ what i found ill was the switch, g.know on some lemme get this off my chest one time, then Oats just come in like lemme just school you niggas right quick...man the shit was nice. & i aint miss the truths up in Oats verse at all,
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just synthetic value, like your answer to "what do you do for a living?
i fux with the message behind that whole first verse Oats, ^ just like the way you put that.

keeping it true to how i felt it, both you niggaz lost a lil steem with your second, but that aint all that a negative critique.
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I've studied the ropes, and id survive where others would fail
Cause I can do without food, while other mutha fuckaz are frail
The kind of dust I've inhailed could break a mans lungs apart
g.know ^ these three lines to me dont fit, iunno if you intended it to come of on some brash type shit, or paint the contrast, but to me i got the brashness off these lines more that anything...< thats about the only crique ive got.
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From the start ive gone hard, but what about the ones who's soft
a dope line for the meaning & cause of what proceeded it.
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workin 9 to 9 you don't have time to imagine how that feels
another line that i thought was nice, nothing clever, more just for the simple fucking realness that so many overlook. Oats you closed it off just how the shit deserved.

fuck else can i say, props to both you muhfukaz you done right on this,

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