Heaven on Earth

08-01-2013, 12:12 AM

This was nice, yeah some of it rhymed a bit simple, but it was schemed real well and addressed complex feelings. Also it was uplifting, and felt like a breath of fresh air, which was dope. Your word choice also conveyed real emotion, and held the same type of tone too. Flow was on point throughout, and this was a nice read. Very enjoyable.

Fav Lines - "now were winning, the beginning, can be found in roots,
the seeds that we planted, have grown into a surrounding group/"

keep at it man.

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08-01-2013, 12:12 AM	#5
Rawn M.D. Guest Posts: n/a	This was nice, yeah some of it rhymed a bit simple, but it was schemed real well and addressed complex feelings. Also it was uplifting, and felt like a breath of fresh air, which was dope. Your word choice also conveyed real emotion, and held the same type of tone too. Flow was on point throughout, and this was a nice read. Very enjoyable. Fav Lines - "now were winning, the beginning, can be found in roots, the seeds that we planted, have grown into a surrounding group/" keep at it man.