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Old 07-13-2013, 04:30 AM   #4
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Really enjoyed the ending and the opening....this felt like it was written after long breaks and in 3 segments...you seemed to tackle many themes under the sun which gave this a ambiguous nature. Though full of worthy thoughts, I sense three directions in this...the opening...and the body between that and what I have quoted. Brilliant snippets and lines truly in this...this was a great effort and a very solid read.

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ruthfully, are we dunking the ball or just laying it up?
Are we under the sprawl of a decaying, corrupt age of distrust,
scraping the clutches, raping a mother who simply claimed it enough?
Do we show compassion or are we just following moral restraints
I’m convinced that Right and Wrong are dead planets, orbiting Faith
Some pray to God, others prey on others as the “lords” of their race
while being elitist only means one thing: priorities are sorely misplaced
Writer’s Block is a biological weapon set against us apes
for bible scholars, vying authors - selected strains to alter our genetic traits
Science fosters collective drainage of innovation, meant to resonate
flesh is clay, imprisoned in Section 8, nocturnal insects definitely relate
If you’re feeling implored, take a trek with the spiritual Moor
Man walks on two limbs yet it’s his brain he mostly needs agility for
Some rest under sycamores sipping Coors from society’s umbilical cord
others weave tangerine sun sonatas in the shadows; the ceilings of lore
Some cash in their schillings of war, only feeling the symptoms after
our achilles heel hooks us with wisdom only inherent in jiu-jitsu masters
loved this...you are a very humble cat Vulgar only added to your likeability. You have much to teach others

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