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12-01-2020, 11:04 PM
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Banned
Join Date: Aug 2014
Posts: 2,956
Battle Record: 6 - 14
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I'm not religious but this was still interesting to me.
You have good structure, particularly the multis in the first stanza. I could argue your final stanza ruined things. Anti-climactic. Good stuff though |
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