WEEK 4: MMLP vs Scar - 5-2 SCAR WINS

Ender · 04-17-2020, 09:48 PM

MMLP
I enjoyed reading a piece that was so clearly on the storytelling side, rather than the poetic. That may put a ceiling on how well you can do in a league like this, where the top end of the league is made up of writers who use heavily poetic language, but personally I'm predisposed to enjoy storytellers rather than poets. However, this does put a lot of pressure on your story, because you generally don't have the technical aspects (multis, flow, imagery) to fall back on if voters fail to connect with your story. I'm also a fan of twist endings in general. However I didn't really connect with this piece. The story did not have enough action for my taste, nor was there enough misdirection for the twist to have the impact it needed. I do like your style though, so I'm looking forward to your next piece.

Scar
I liked this a lot. I found it a little obscure, but there was real deeper meaning here, not simply a flexing of vocabulary. I enjoyed how much you trusted your readers to either understand your references to Virginia Woolf's life, or Google it. I thought it was clever to represent her suspected mental disorders as a split personality, and name one side of the personality Virginia and the other side Adeline. The foreshadowing of visiting the River Ouse soon was nice. I didn't have any real problems with this. I think it's the best piece I've read so far this week.

A real clash of styles here, but I felt like I connected more with Scar's piece. The content intrigued me and it was well written.

Vote - Scar

04-17-2020, 09:48 PM	#10
Ender Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2017 Posts: 118 Battle Record: 5-12 Rep Power: 247411	MMLP I enjoyed reading a piece that was so clearly on the storytelling side, rather than the poetic. That may put a ceiling on how well you can do in a league like this, where the top end of the league is made up of writers who use heavily poetic language, but personally I'm predisposed to enjoy storytellers rather than poets. However, this does put a lot of pressure on your story, because you generally don't have the technical aspects (multis, flow, imagery) to fall back on if voters fail to connect with your story. I'm also a fan of twist endings in general. However I didn't really connect with this piece. The story did not have enough action for my taste, nor was there enough misdirection for the twist to have the impact it needed. I do like your style though, so I'm looking forward to your next piece. Scar I liked this a lot. I found it a little obscure, but there was real deeper meaning here, not simply a flexing of vocabulary. I enjoyed how much you trusted your readers to either understand your references to Virginia Woolf's life, or Google it. I thought it was clever to represent her suspected mental disorders as a split personality, and name one side of the personality Virginia and the other side Adeline. The foreshadowing of visiting the River Ouse soon was nice. I didn't have any real problems with this. I think it's the best piece I've read so far this week. A real clash of styles here, but I felt like I connected more with Scar's piece. The content intrigued me and it was well written. Vote - Scar