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Sharp · 03-26-2019, 09:52 PM

this read pretty smoothly and I normally trip over multis. I'm gathering this is all coming from you and saying your piece, but not exactly stream of thought, though there's a real cohesion to it. Like, you can draw a line 'I'm thirty, I'm FINE' to the DM stuff, which was funny. Felt the piece as a whole was the perfect length, where I could stand to read more, but you got everything you needed to say out.

Noticed a lot of small, telling things that kind of give me the sense of self-reflection that is the least bit melancholic but with good humor. Big standouts for me were:

to pass the backasswards lackluster backbuster jackass that is time.
"I'm thirty, I'm FINE!"

I'm mostly the ghostly joker barred in viking folklore that signed with TalkMore,

There's a real difference in tone from viking folklore to TalkMore (which I googled), but it holds together really well

03-26-2019, 09:52 PM	#8
Sharp HE / HIM / FRAC Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: PA Posts: 11,592 Battle Record: 56-21 Accomplishments - 50+ Wins Champed - The Ultimate Writer - NBL Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12601538	this read pretty smoothly and I normally trip over multis. I'm gathering this is all coming from you and saying your piece, but not exactly stream of thought, though there's a real cohesion to it. Like, you can draw a line 'I'm thirty, I'm FINE' to the DM stuff, which was funny. Felt the piece as a whole was the perfect length, where I could stand to read more, but you got everything you needed to say out. Noticed a lot of small, telling things that kind of give me the sense of self-reflection that is the least bit melancholic but with good humor. Big standouts for me were: to pass the backasswards lackluster backbuster jackass that is time. "I'm thirty, I'm FINE!" I'm mostly the ghostly joker barred in viking folklore that signed with TalkMore, There's a real difference in tone from viking folklore to TalkMore (which I googled), but it holds together really well