09-15-2018, 11:32 PM | #21 |
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I went to quote what I liked, and left the whole thing quoted. I greatly enjoyed how the whole thing was composed of indivdual, coherent sentences. Not to shit on anyone using phrases separated by commas, or like people utilizing creative license for sentences in their pieces. But this is refreshing to see the opposite hand.
Especially in the beginning-- great job of chopping up the structure to avoid falling into a lull. Interesting message and on the first read through, found it engaging/ captivating. keep writing
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