Darker Ego vs. classickERBL - CLASSICK WINS

For Battling · 01-26-2018, 03:23 PM

Nothing classic about it you only steaming like a kettle!!
Your verse should come with a label that says "Easy to assemble!!"
youve got the right idea but this wasn’t tough at all
Wouldn`t consider your words holy if you were preaching from a temple!!
setup?
Contenders melt under degrees that are infernal,
On this possession puking pieces of metal,
A cold winter cloud invades freezing their internal
ahh you’re a topical head, I get it now. That’s good and bad. Bad because you rely simply on smooth rhyming, good because you understand how to incorporate multis
Through these 16 lines? Your blood flow like exposing a nerve!!
Its purposely absurd and actually more than you deserve
eh
I am fly like pegasus above the clouds abruptly I swerve
with ya carcass gored to throw it in the curve
Golden hits this Drunken miss can`t handle an open diss
But persist, Its like You throwing punches with broken fist
You never make it to the top like sunken ships!!
the monster picking teeth of meat crush to bits
Drop you so hard it`ll cause the earth polar crust to shift!!
Enjoy the space among stars and aliens this is just a lift,
You get smoke faster than 5 Jamaicans vs just a spliff!!
yeah Man basically you just have to work on setup/punchline delivery, making your concepts creative and original

Vs

This when I start incisions, cannon flash bringin some light to Darker visions
Smart precision...heavy gun, the kick make me go back and forth its a hard decision
sheesh, this was nice.
No regular tex , im the type character to send a deeper message,knife game dirty ,catch a mean infection
The ink I write with deadly , u get lead when the arm pointing if u need direction
nice again, just work on shortening the lines a bit, maybe don’t try to incorporate too much? Still good tho
Stop speaking reckless or u’ll leak intestines and all ya guts hangin
bucks aimin , that will bring this bitch ego down like slut shaming
alright
Them lines u spit?….Not godly..i’ll give this kin the z’s , bob marley
Then turn up with ratchets on deck by the boatload like a yacht party
ok not bad
Long round hit his chess 1st , he strugle with bars I got more to feed u, let off all the eagles
Fuck what his self worth , this double U gon leave his personality split , I alter Ego’s
FIRE
I aint meant to diss the site, we all make mistakes so put that on a tab partner
Yo rhymes trash , u dont even jab proper , I punch outta hunger like Math hoffa
hoffa concepts are played man
Me and the crew catch bodies and cut em to pieces , live in the cut
Reel lines , if they catch the bait den we start choppin it up !
ehh

Classick caught a BODY here. Next gen @MFtastick in the making?! Good shit bro, everything except the last 2 bars were quotes. Darker Ego you gotta figure out how to transcend from topical to text.

Vote classick

01-26-2018, 03:23 PM	#13
For Battling Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2017 Posts: 3,986 Battle Record: 11-6 Rep Power: 5633916	Nothing classic about it you only steaming like a kettle!! Your verse should come with a label that says "Easy to assemble!!" youve got the right idea but this wasn’t tough at all Wouldn`t consider your words holy if you were preaching from a temple!! setup? Contenders melt under degrees that are infernal, On this possession puking pieces of metal, A cold winter cloud invades freezing their internal ahh you’re a topical head, I get it now. That’s good and bad. Bad because you rely simply on smooth rhyming, good because you understand how to incorporate multis Through these 16 lines? Your blood flow like exposing a nerve!! Its purposely absurd and actually more than you deserve eh I am fly like pegasus above the clouds abruptly I swerve with ya carcass gored to throw it in the curve Golden hits this Drunken miss can`t handle an open diss But persist, Its like You throwing punches with broken fist You never make it to the top like sunken ships!! the monster picking teeth of meat crush to bits Drop you so hard it`ll cause the earth polar crust to shift!! Enjoy the space among stars and aliens this is just a lift, You get smoke faster than 5 Jamaicans vs just a spliff!! yeah Man basically you just have to work on setup/punchline delivery, making your concepts creative and original Vs This when I start incisions, cannon flash bringin some light to Darker visions Smart precision...heavy gun, the kick make me go back and forth its a hard decision sheesh, this was nice. No regular tex , im the type character to send a deeper message,knife game dirty ,catch a mean infection The ink I write with deadly , u get lead when the arm pointing if u need direction nice again, just work on shortening the lines a bit, maybe don’t try to incorporate too much? Still good tho Stop speaking reckless or u’ll leak intestines and all ya guts hangin bucks aimin , that will bring this bitch ego down like slut shaming alright Them lines u spit?….Not godly..i’ll give this kin the z’s , bob marley Then turn up with ratchets on deck by the boatload like a yacht party ok not bad Long round hit his chess 1st , he strugle with bars I got more to feed u, let off all the eagles Fuck what his self worth , this double U gon leave his personality split , I alter Ego’s FIRE I aint meant to diss the site, we all make mistakes so put that on a tab partner Yo rhymes trash , u dont even jab proper , I punch outta hunger like Math hoffa hoffa concepts are played man Me and the crew catch bodies and cut em to pieces , live in the cut Reel lines , if they catch the bait den we start choppin it up ! ehh Classick caught a BODY here. Next gen @MFtastick in the making?! Good shit bro, everything except the last 2 bars were quotes. Darker Ego you gotta figure out how to transcend from topical to text. Vote classick