Week III: Diablo vs NYCSPITZ[DIABLO WINS]

MMLP · 12-31-2017, 11:02 AM

NYC - Nice verse, liked the science fiction even though I'm not a great fan usually. The flow was pretty smooth in places i have to admit but lines were long a lot of the time, also the rhyming annoyed me in a few spots because it didnt match up phonetically in quite a few spots and made it jar and read awkwardly which interupted the flow for me personally. I couldn't get past that. It put a dent in what was essentially a good verse, and I liked the references throughout but it ended a bit...flat tbh. Didn't really go anywhere after all the build up... I duno, those r the two real main gripes for me.

Diablo: solid verse from baron on the Samurai warrior take, not seen you go that route before, it's something NYC usually goes lol anyway flow was nice as always, no hiccups, which really appeals to me, maybe as a more casual reader of these. rhyming was so subtle in places n harder to spot n makes it more challenging in a very good way. All this whilst maintaining comprehendable content. Way too many ppl sleep on what your actually rhyming. It reads like a completed game of Tetris which was extraordinary to me - just rhymes on top of rhymes, rhyming the entire line pretty much throughout my crazy. U know how much I try to emulate it haha

I enjoyed both reads but id go with diablNYC - Nice verse, liked the science fiction even though I'm not a great fan usually. The flow was pretty smooth in places i have to admit but lines were long a lot of the time, also the rhyming annoyed me in a few spots because it didnt match up phonetically in quite a few spots and made it jar and read awkwardly which disturbed the flow for me personally. I couldn't get past that. It put a dent in what was essentially a good verse, and I liked the references throughout but it ended a bit flat tbh. Didn't really go anywhere after all the build up.

Diablo: solid verse baron on the Samurai warrior take, not seen you go that route before, it's something NYC usually goes LOL anyway flow was nice as always, no hiccups, which really appeals to me at least, maybe as a more casual reader of these. rhyming was so subtle in places n harder to spot n makes it more challenging in a very good way. Way too many ppl sleep on what your actually rhyming. It reads like a completed game of Tetris which was extraordinary to me - just rhymes on top of rhymes, rhyming the entire line pretty much throughout my crazy. U know how much I try to emulate it haha

I enjoyed both reads but i got eminems biggest fan Diablo for this. Slightly more satisfied upon finishing his verse more

12-31-2017, 11:02 AM	#12
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	NYC - Nice verse, liked the science fiction even though I'm not a great fan usually. The flow was pretty smooth in places i have to admit but lines were long a lot of the time, also the rhyming annoyed me in a few spots because it didnt match up phonetically in quite a few spots and made it jar and read awkwardly which interupted the flow for me personally. I couldn't get past that. It put a dent in what was essentially a good verse, and I liked the references throughout but it ended a bit...flat tbh. Didn't really go anywhere after all the build up... I duno, those r the two real main gripes for me. Diablo: solid verse from baron on the Samurai warrior take, not seen you go that route before, it's something NYC usually goes lol anyway flow was nice as always, no hiccups, which really appeals to me, maybe as a more casual reader of these. rhyming was so subtle in places n harder to spot n makes it more challenging in a very good way. All this whilst maintaining comprehendable content. Way too many ppl sleep on what your actually rhyming. It reads like a completed game of Tetris which was extraordinary to me - just rhymes on top of rhymes, rhyming the entire line pretty much throughout my crazy. U know how much I try to emulate it haha I enjoyed both reads but id go with diablNYC - Nice verse, liked the science fiction even though I'm not a great fan usually. The flow was pretty smooth in places i have to admit but lines were long a lot of the time, also the rhyming annoyed me in a few spots because it didnt match up phonetically in quite a few spots and made it jar and read awkwardly which disturbed the flow for me personally. I couldn't get past that. It put a dent in what was essentially a good verse, and I liked the references throughout but it ended a bit flat tbh. Didn't really go anywhere after all the build up. Diablo: solid verse baron on the Samurai warrior take, not seen you go that route before, it's something NYC usually goes LOL anyway flow was nice as always, no hiccups, which really appeals to me at least, maybe as a more casual reader of these. rhyming was so subtle in places n harder to spot n makes it more challenging in a very good way. Way too many ppl sleep on what your actually rhyming. It reads like a completed game of Tetris which was extraordinary to me - just rhymes on top of rhymes, rhyming the entire line pretty much throughout my crazy. U know how much I try to emulate it haha I enjoyed both reads but i got eminems biggest fan Diablo for this. Slightly more satisfied upon finishing his verse more