Week 6: Breathless vs. ZeeDee (BREATHLESS WINS 4-3)

Frank · 04-13-2016, 10:38 AM

MVGT ZeeDee

ZeeDee never fails to assimilate sexual escapades into his writings haha. Centering his raunchy approaches around the vulgar and taboo. Prolific writing, some noticeably interwoven multies throughout kept the verse erect enough to penetrate the psyche until the anticlimactic final line. You captured this moment, this fantasy, in a bubble. You are one of the most adept at depicting graphic portrayals of this nature online. Stick around. Welcome back. Breathless verse was effective as a free flowing spin on the prophecys and everything it entails. I liked and disliked the disconnected flow. On one hand, it registered as spontaneous. On the other hand, it teeter tottered on discombobulatedness. Breathless was more poignant in the last 3/4ths, some fancy movement was on display in your technique. Ultimately I just enjoyed ZeeDees wilder, much more daring approach.

04-13-2016, 10:38 AM	#9
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	MVGT ZeeDee ZeeDee never fails to assimilate sexual escapades into his writings haha. Centering his raunchy approaches around the vulgar and taboo. Prolific writing, some noticeably interwoven multies throughout kept the verse erect enough to penetrate the psyche until the anticlimactic final line. You captured this moment, this fantasy, in a bubble. You are one of the most adept at depicting graphic portrayals of this nature online. Stick around. Welcome back. Breathless verse was effective as a free flowing spin on the prophecys and everything it entails. I liked and disliked the disconnected flow. On one hand, it registered as spontaneous. On the other hand, it teeter tottered on discombobulatedness. Breathless was more poignant in the last 3/4ths, some fancy movement was on display in your technique. Ultimately I just enjoyed ZeeDees wilder, much more daring approach. __________________ *VETWORK* Last edited by Frank; 04-13-2016 at 10:41 AM.