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Old 10-24-2015, 02:33 AM   #1
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Default Anna Did It

Verse I wrote on RB for a battle in the topical league. Wanted some more feedback on it.

Anna Did It


Quick get her to the table, she's going into an Anaphylactic shock
Oxygen rate drops, she's barely breathing and her passage is blocked.
We need ventilation in her lungs, We have to start the intubation
The flatline went off and filled the room with broken hearts and devastation.

... on the other side of the glass

"Lucy how did this happen? You were with her and seen, right"
I don't know daddy, I think anna pushed down the beehive.
"Who the hell is Anna? You know how allergic you sister is
How are we going to tell your mother? I can't even picture this"

Anna is little dolly, she said she was protecting me,
She said that she could clear away all of my jealously
"I'm sorry Lucy, your too young to realize whats happened,
It just happened so fast N... The doctor n then the line flattened..."

My father stood beyond the glass, not knowing how it's possible
In and out of the weeping cries that could be heard throughout the hospital.

... 2 Years later

Come on, Anna, We are going to be late for school
No! You know what happens when I break the rules
I snatched Anna up, and kissed my parents goodbye
It's been 2 years and I still see the pain in their eyes
They think it's all my fault, Anna, but you hurt her
And my parents really think I committed a murder!!
...
It's 1:00 now and I'm sitting the principals office
He's on the phone and I can hear my parents just lost it
He told them I pushed the kid off the monkey bars
But it was you, Anna, you really have an ugly heart!!
I was suspended for 3 days, hopped in my parents car when they arrived
No! Anna you can't do that, I don't want them to die!
"What's that lucy? Are you still talking to Anna?
Hand it over now, She's not real and your driving us bananas
Your grounded and your not going to be keeping this doll
You can't hurt other people and think Anna's taking the fall"


As soon as he grabbed her, everything went black
and I woke up, back in the hospital and asked for my dad
The doctor told he'd make it, he had his leg amputated
And danced around the fact my mother got decapitated
But I heard em when he walked out, it was weak and muddled
But I think he told the doctor that there seemed to be a struggle.
It was weeks before we made it home, just me and father
Him mourning his losses, making me feel like I wasn't his daughter.
It wasn't until a year later, I was just turning seven
Finally broke and said I'm the reason that their in heaven
Told me he had a surprise, to bring anna with me
I was excited, I followed him to the garage quickly
But I could tell he was tipsy, smelling like his whiskey
I could feel it, the sorrows and eyes see me as guilty.

Okay, daddy whats the surprise...
"Sit down, lucy, it's time, and I'm gonna say this polite
Anna has to go, your too attached to a toy, it's all just pretend
I'm unthreaded this doll, I'm putting this shit to an end"

Anna said not to do that, she'd said that you'll regret it
She said if you touch one lace, it's a gonna be your death wish.
My father ignored me, reached out for his scissors and a needle
Within seconds the a hammer swung with enough force to be lethal
Smash after smash, creating open wounds and broken bones
He lay their in a puddle and I stand their in a frozen home.
Staring right at one of my fathers creations, just looking at my reflection
Confused... Where's Anna? All I saw was just me and the weapon...

A couple weeks later an officer asked me some questions about my pop and
Told me, with no family, orphanage or foster care was my only options
'I've been through a lot, and my head is kinda foggy
Wherever you take me, we just can't forget my dolly...
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