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The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
Battle Record: 35-45
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And thus, "England Prevails" the same as a ship with the wind in its sails
propeled by a lie, assuaging the course thus they fell into binds with the raging divorce of hatred and force, no refrain or remorse only swing stories and fabrication maintaining with force. An image of prosperity, reanimating a corpse. I enjoyed this section but hated how you used force twice that's my only gripe with pieces a majority of the time it seems like you really did your homework which is great I love the movie, fan of the comics & there's a lot of angles to attack this at you really molded into a well thought idea and made the piece shine I feel I really don't know what else to say, I thought this was dope... Revolutionary souls lost between the translation From paper to actual realization Tamed rebels conquering acres of cages House broken outcast's outlawed from the pages ^^^ I thought this was cool, but towards the end I was really let down from what I've seen from you lately you tend to say a lot by saying so little this time around maybe the inspiration was lacking, or maybe you rushed to finish this verse? I enjoy your take, but that opening just felt kind of off to me, maybe I'm looking to deep into it but I felt like this is a step back from what you've shown you can do... either way I enjoyed the quoted above... v/Ullr, He came prepared, doing his research on his topic, as I should have he brought stronger detail, and really used the characters and film to his advantage it shows throughout the piece & makes it very enjoyable read. as for Inno it seems like he's focused on other things at the moment to thoroughly write a verse this time around which is fine, but I feel as it effected him in this battle, causing him to lose although his opponent is a dope writer when he's on his shit. so this was still a cool battle nice work fellas
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