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Mr. J · 05-26-2015, 09:40 AM

The blending of both of your styles is quite the compliment
I believe the beginning was Zen, I have come to know this new format of his
the introduction and the flow of each line brought a smooth opener for Split
first you allow the reader to get engulfed into each and every line
then you allow the build up to take on a different form
the dialogue that Split adds brings a different perspective on the character at hand
I feel that the consistency and the clashing of flows worked well here
Split brought a more dynamic approach, as the character I feel
as Zen played narrator..keep up the good work fella's
you two have really made a piece worth reading, I'd quote..
but I don't want to get my assumptions wrong..
either way I enjoyed this fella's keep on writing, and I'll be around to peep it

05-26-2015, 09:40 AM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	The blending of both of your styles is quite the compliment I believe the beginning was Zen, I have come to know this new format of his the introduction and the flow of each line brought a smooth opener for Split first you allow the reader to get engulfed into each and every line then you allow the build up to take on a different form the dialogue that Split adds brings a different perspective on the character at hand I feel that the consistency and the clashing of flows worked well here Split brought a more dynamic approach, as the character I feel as Zen played narrator..keep up the good work fella's you two have really made a piece worth reading, I'd quote.. but I don't want to get my assumptions wrong.. either way I enjoyed this fella's keep on writing, and I'll be around to peep it __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you