Fiendscape

Mr. J · 11-07-2014, 04:22 PM

Well after "Sinister" I kind of lost interest then I got to the half and half
and thought this could have been cream if he followed through with how the beginning went
after reading on I felt you just got drunk slurred half the text and went off on a tangent
otherwise I kept reading and realized you were doing pretty good at linking it all together
but it just seemed like it happened a little later than how you started off
it was a cool little read though, I wasnt blown away...but I wasn't disappointed either
keep writing young one

11-07-2014, 04:22 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Well after "Sinister" I kind of lost interest then I got to the half and half and thought this could have been cream if he followed through with how the beginning went after reading on I felt you just got drunk slurred half the text and went off on a tangent otherwise I kept reading and realized you were doing pretty good at linking it all together but it just seemed like it happened a little later than how you started off it was a cool little read though, I wasnt blown away...but I wasn't disappointed either keep writing young one __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you