WK2 : Greed(0-1) vs. Innovator(0-1) - Greed 6-0

Three-Planes-Aligned · 10-12-2014, 01:41 PM

Greed - in-character this works really nice with a very authentic verbiage. Now, there's a coin-flip's chance you'll write something very similiar without the topic matching up too well and I'll be less impressed in retrospect but overall, I thought this was a breeze. Dem flows tight yo.

Innovator - Nope, did not like (which might not be much of a blow since I'm guessing 'had no time sorry' wasn't part of the verse). You know what it is man - this is almost too short to critique, no development or overarching theme to take a stab at. Your wording seems fairly solid, I'd like to see it expressed within the frame of an entire piece.

No surprises, Vote: Greed

10-12-2014, 01:41 PM	#7
Three-Planes-Aligned Hyphenated Join Date: Apr 2014 Location: The Black Lodge Posts: 79 Battle Record: 7-8 Rep Power: 549513	Greed - in-character this works really nice with a very authentic verbiage. Now, there's a coin-flip's chance you'll write something very similiar without the topic matching up too well and I'll be less impressed in retrospect but overall, I thought this was a breeze. Dem flows tight yo. Innovator - Nope, did not like (which might not be much of a blow since I'm guessing 'had no time sorry' wasn't part of the verse). You know what it is man - this is almost too short to critique, no development or overarching theme to take a stab at. Your wording seems fairly solid, I'd like to see it expressed within the frame of an entire piece. No surprises, Vote: Greed