Week 1: Innovator vs. Dove Dozer [Dove Dozer wins, 8-4.]

Three-Planes-Aligned · 10-04-2014, 01:46 AM

Innovator - Visually subtle but effective, lots of imagery chained and interlocked building towards the bigger picture. The one thng striking me as slightly annoying is this haughty combination of meter/wording - comes across as poetry and that isn't a compliment coming from me. Overall I liked this piece though, you did a lot with understated brush strokes.

Dove Dozer - Very uneven and jagged. There's actually a handful of lines that achieve a high standard both in terms of coherent, tight wording and hit that smooth spot mechanically. Criminally underdeveloped and fairly basic in the theme department.

Overall I think Innovator was alone to produce a cohesive reading experience (both actually used similar length if you account for formatting) so my vote goes to him - Dove Dozer provided more of a demo.

10-04-2014, 01:46 AM	#6
Three-Planes-Aligned Hyphenated Join Date: Apr 2014 Location: The Black Lodge Posts: 79 Battle Record: 7-8 Rep Power: 549513	Innovator - Visually subtle but effective, lots of imagery chained and interlocked building towards the bigger picture. The one thng striking me as slightly annoying is this haughty combination of meter/wording - comes across as poetry and that isn't a compliment coming from me. Overall I liked this piece though, you did a lot with understated brush strokes. Dove Dozer - Very uneven and jagged. There's actually a handful of lines that achieve a high standard both in terms of coherent, tight wording and hit that smooth spot mechanically. Criminally underdeveloped and fairly basic in the theme department. Overall I think Innovator was alone to produce a cohesive reading experience (both actually used similar length if you account for formatting) so my vote goes to him - Dove Dozer provided more of a demo.