Round 2: 7. Diode vs. 2. oats \\ oats wins 10-(-4)

jilti · 09-07-2014, 07:58 PM

Oats, well crafted verse. Didnt tie into the topic til the end of the verse which is a good thing. Rhyming mechanics were on point.
These lines stood out..

earth began as flat and central, man's signature flawed prediction:
Go too far and you'll fall off - into the middle of all existence
Stuck in traditional knowledge, smitten by all our typical botched admissions
Our physical laws are trivial novels - written as cosmic fiction
First there was only one Sun, the pinnacle of majesty!
...except for all the other solar systems riddled through the galaxy

Diode cool piece. Nice flow
this bar was dope..

vagina tears, crowns, delivery head down
placenta surfs a wave of crimson through the birth canal

Conclusion: Oats had a better more creative take on the topic. Both verses were good tho
Vote = Oats

09-07-2014, 07:58 PM	#12
jilti neckties Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,629 Battle Record: 43-19 Champed - BA Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 20816228	Oats, well crafted verse. Didnt tie into the topic til the end of the verse which is a good thing. Rhyming mechanics were on point. These lines stood out.. earth began as flat and central, man's signature flawed prediction: Go too far and you'll fall off - into the middle of all existence Stuck in traditional knowledge, smitten by all our typical botched admissions Our physical laws are trivial novels - written as cosmic fiction First there was only one Sun, the pinnacle of majesty! ...except for all the other solar systems riddled through the galaxy Diode cool piece. Nice flow this bar was dope.. vagina tears, crowns, delivery head down placenta surfs a wave of crimson through the birth canal Conclusion: Oats had a better more creative take on the topic. Both verses were good tho Vote = Oats