AOWL Week 6: Brass Body (0-0) VS. TopicalDood5 (0-0) [TOPICALDOOD5 wins, 8-3.]

Cereal_Killa · 03-26-2013, 02:28 AM

Mike:

Man this was tiiiaght.. The rhythmic flow from your cretic lines made this hit direct and punchy at the same time your constant combination of them made this run smoothly.. Representing Mickey Wards fighting style in the ring.. A few times this altered but not dramticly where a reader would be pushed away.. All in all vocab strong, cool structure and the delivery of the tale though not too much to it progressed at a solid rate.. Sweet piece mate..

Topic:

Dude is dope, straight up.. Your imagery was easily the strongest element of this verse.. With a wide range of colours you painted a wonderous yet looming picture, with a potent point at the end.. Delivered well with quality language and a working irregular rhyme scheme.. This was hot.. Story itself cool, you really did capture the aura of a scholar imo.. sort of making him represent somewhat like a wizard of unimaginable knowledge.. I highly enjoyed this..

Vote = topicaldood5

Mike I hope you don’t take the playful bullshit in the chat lounge too serious.. man you can write, this week you got shunted out by some seriously extreme imagery by dood5 who captured is character stronger.. I think this was an awesome match and hope wrecka stays signed in.. GL to both yall brought some flames..

03-26-2013, 02:28 AM	#16
Cereal_Killa Licking Lily's.. Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 706 Battle Record: 11-6 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 3565733	Mike: Man this was tiiiaght.. The rhythmic flow from your cretic lines made this hit direct and punchy at the same time your constant combination of them made this run smoothly.. Representing Mickey Wards fighting style in the ring.. A few times this altered but not dramticly where a reader would be pushed away.. All in all vocab strong, cool structure and the delivery of the tale though not too much to it progressed at a solid rate.. Sweet piece mate.. Topic: Dude is dope, straight up.. Your imagery was easily the strongest element of this verse.. With a wide range of colours you painted a wonderous yet looming picture, with a potent point at the end.. Delivered well with quality language and a working irregular rhyme scheme.. This was hot.. Story itself cool, you really did capture the aura of a scholar imo.. sort of making him represent somewhat like a wizard of unimaginable knowledge.. I highly enjoyed this.. Vote = topicaldood5 Mike I hope you don’t take the playful bullshit in the chat lounge too serious.. man you can write, this week you got shunted out by some seriously extreme imagery by dood5 who captured is character stronger.. I think this was an awesome match and hope wrecka stays signed in.. GL to both yall brought some flames.. __________________ You think YOU'RE sick I shit cough drops ..