Bonus battle: Adonis vs. zygote \\ Adonis wins 5-1

King Ra. · 06-09-2014, 02:26 AM

zygote, you just continue to dabble in realms not other would travel in. This week was a complete curveball. Now, reading your piece, it doesn't rhyme at all.... I don't think I've read a topical that didn't, but this is a first for me. I guess what doesn't make that aspect hurt you much is the fresh direction you took. You wrote a script, which tied with the topic well. The story seemed to be lacking a bit though. Wasn't entirely drawn much other than the fact you took this route which is unprecedented. Nice. Adonis, you didn't tie to the topic too well, but I liked the way you wrote this and the story was okay. Your rhymes carried you this week and that's what stood out most. I especially liked the first couple of lines. This would have been complete if it tied to the topic a bit more though, but I think you managed to put everything together well enough. Though zygote came with a very fresh original direction, I thought his story/script didn't supply enough juice, whereas Adonis story, though not fully tying with the topic (could be missing something) I felt he managed to put together a more solid story, and good rhyming that drove it along.

MVGT: Adonis. Good job by both competitors.

06-09-2014, 02:26 AM	#7
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	zygote, you just continue to dabble in realms not other would travel in. This week was a complete curveball. Now, reading your piece, it doesn't rhyme at all.... I don't think I've read a topical that didn't, but this is a first for me. I guess what doesn't make that aspect hurt you much is the fresh direction you took. You wrote a script, which tied with the topic well. The story seemed to be lacking a bit though. Wasn't entirely drawn much other than the fact you took this route which is unprecedented. Nice. Adonis, you didn't tie to the topic too well, but I liked the way you wrote this and the story was okay. Your rhymes carried you this week and that's what stood out most. I especially liked the first couple of lines. This would have been complete if it tied to the topic a bit more though, but I think you managed to put everything together well enough. Though zygote came with a very fresh original direction, I thought his story/script didn't supply enough juice, whereas Adonis story, though not fully tying with the topic (could be missing something) I felt he managed to put together a more solid story, and good rhyming that drove it along. MVGT: Adonis. Good job by both competitors. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.