Week 9: 17. d0ubt (0-1) vs. 18. MMLP (0-2) \\ d0ubt wins 5-3

Adonis · 04-27-2014, 08:21 PM

Mm- all over the place bro. This was a tough due to the grammatical errors and our omissions. This in turn fucked with your flow. I didn't enjoy the story either due to the lack of climax and build up. Overall, I can only be honest and say I was not a fan this week.

Doubt - i wasn't the biggest fan of this either. It had pace, which was cool, not the strongest in rhyme either, a decent verse at best. You will get my vote here, but I feel like I would have voted against you against some of the other opponents. Anyways, the eye story was ok. I think you could have gone a but more gruesome, a bit more imagery and overall cut bits out and added more to convey a truer story

Vote doubt

04-27-2014, 08:21 PM	#8
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Mm- all over the place bro. This was a tough due to the grammatical errors and our omissions. This in turn fucked with your flow. I didn't enjoy the story either due to the lack of climax and build up. Overall, I can only be honest and say I was not a fan this week. Doubt - i wasn't the biggest fan of this either. It had pace, which was cool, not the strongest in rhyme either, a decent verse at best. You will get my vote here, but I feel like I would have voted against you against some of the other opponents. Anyways, the eye story was ok. I think you could have gone a but more gruesome, a bit more imagery and overall cut bits out and added more to convey a truer story Vote doubt __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR Last edited by Adonis; 04-27-2014 at 08:31 PM.