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Exis · 04-10-2014, 03:10 PM

samurai soul. self sacrifice who sat in a grove
watched the valleys grow to cityscapes and vanish below
it could be simple. like a ripple in a glass of merlot
a flash of the bulb, grainy photograph, thumbtacked to a post

^^Nice.

i've been victimized by imitation more than a bit
his lordship. mighty morpheme power laser equipped
horseback ranger with an arrow pointed straight at your neck
leave me exempt. forget your hall of fame and respect
probably rated best. i haven't bothered to check
molten lava. magma melodies that melted the wax
whether crystalized or fluid our intelligence stats
candles and chrysanthemum, that sensory snap
crackling like cherrywood. that's Frank with an axe

^^Dope.

This is good Black...imagery is always a feature in your pieces and this had it in spades.Thought how you opened was slick, the middle was solid and what I quoted last was the best part of the verse.I have to be in the mood to read your work a lot of the time man, it's kinda depressin' and I'm an angry person lol...thoroughly enjoyable stuff though.

Stay upwards.

04-10-2014, 03:10 PM	#30
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	samurai soul. self sacrifice who sat in a grove watched the valleys grow to cityscapes and vanish below it could be simple. like a ripple in a glass of merlot a flash of the bulb, grainy photograph, thumbtacked to a post ^^Nice. i've been victimized by imitation more than a bit his lordship. mighty morpheme power laser equipped horseback ranger with an arrow pointed straight at your neck leave me exempt. forget your hall of fame and respect probably rated best. i haven't bothered to check molten lava. magma melodies that melted the wax whether crystalized or fluid our intelligence stats candles and chrysanthemum, that sensory snap crackling like cherrywood. that's Frank with an axe ^^Dope. This is good Black...imagery is always a feature in your pieces and this had it in spades.Thought how you opened was slick, the middle was solid and what I quoted last was the best part of the verse.I have to be in the mood to read your work a lot of the time man, it's kinda depressin' and I'm an angry person lol...thoroughly enjoyable stuff though. Stay upwards.