AOWL Week 5: Mac (1-1) VS. patrown (0-1) OPEN FOR VOTES!!!

Inno · 03-18-2013, 10:02 AM

looks like its a language problem to me..seems like english isnt macs first language..and so some of the meanings and imagery get left
behind in the translation...thats waht it seems like to me..cuz i see the ideas forming but when they dont it just feels like you didnt know
how to word your thoughts properly..i say working on your craft man..you def got the potential to write some dope shit.

pat.

dope ryhming son. i mean your verse seemed to flow effortlessly..your subject a bit vague, but coherent enough to get the imagery, plot and
theme across to me just fine...

vote- pat.

03-18-2013, 10:02 AM	#11
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	looks like its a language problem to me..seems like english isnt macs first language..and so some of the meanings and imagery get left behind in the translation...thats waht it seems like to me..cuz i see the ideas forming but when they dont it just feels like you didnt know how to word your thoughts properly..i say working on your craft man..you def got the potential to write some dope shit. pat. dope ryhming son. i mean your verse seemed to flow effortlessly..your subject a bit vague, but coherent enough to get the imagery, plot and theme across to me just fine... vote- pat.