Week 1: Diode vs. neutral \\ Diode wins 6-4

H4ZE · 03-01-2014, 10:47 AM

Neutral- I really enjoyed your verse, you had nice rhyming,wording and imagery through out and you went at the topic in a way that made the reader think, and I like that.
Overall- your verse was good in most aspects, flow,rhyming,story telling, imagery. I thought it was dope.

Diode- I enjoyed the first bit. The schemes were good,Flow was on point, and you had nice imagery. But after that when you started writing in another language that threw me off. I knod of lost interest because I couldn't understand what you were saying. But I think through out the verse your rhyming slowly fell off in the lines I could understand.
Overall-this was alright. I think it would've been much better if you would've wrote the whole thing in english. But thats my opinion. Others who understand the language might think differently.

V/ Neutral

03-01-2014, 10:47 AM	#5
H4ZE Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Location: Florida Posts: 77 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 0	Neutral- I really enjoyed your verse, you had nice rhyming,wording and imagery through out and you went at the topic in a way that made the reader think, and I like that. Overall- your verse was good in most aspects, flow,rhyming,story telling, imagery. I thought it was dope. Diode- I enjoyed the first bit. The schemes were good,Flow was on point, and you had nice imagery. But after that when you started writing in another language that threw me off. I knod of lost interest because I couldn't understand what you were saying. But I think through out the verse your rhyming slowly fell off in the lines I could understand. Overall-this was alright. I think it would've been much better if you would've wrote the whole thing in english. But thats my opinion. Others who understand the language might think differently. V/ Neutral Last edited by H4ZE; 03-02-2014 at 04:27 PM.