Week 9 - Certain (6-2) vs. breathless (3-4) - CERTAIN WINS 6-1

Mr. J · 11-22-2013, 06:32 PM

This was a cool battle, a little let down by what went down though
I felt you two come off as better writers then you show at certain points
and you two could have easily taken this to a higher degree then what was showcased
regardless I feel like you pulled off what was needed here...
breathless, your piece was written more...poetically it seemed...which is cool
it's nice getting a different pace from what people seem to know and stick to...
your approach was more imagery based as was your opponents, which was cool
Certain, you seemed to work with more words on your piece
the flow was on point and read somewhat like a short story to me
something that could be added into a elementary/middle school type of book
which was cool because it didn't go beyond what was expected from it
I enjoyed how you placed everything together and came across...what's the word...
I don't know, regardless its easy to see who wins here...
a little more work breathless, and you should start winning some more battles
nice work guys

v/Certain

11-22-2013, 06:32 PM	#5
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was a cool battle, a little let down by what went down though I felt you two come off as better writers then you show at certain points and you two could have easily taken this to a higher degree then what was showcased regardless I feel like you pulled off what was needed here... breathless, your piece was written more...poetically it seemed...which is cool it's nice getting a different pace from what people seem to know and stick to... your approach was more imagery based as was your opponents, which was cool Certain, you seemed to work with more words on your piece the flow was on point and read somewhat like a short story to me something that could be added into a elementary/middle school type of book which was cool because it didn't go beyond what was expected from it I enjoyed how you placed everything together and came across...what's the word... I don't know, regardless its easy to see who wins here... a little more work breathless, and you should start winning some more battles nice work guys v/Certain __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you