Footprints On Your Assole

Split · 07-23-2013, 08:10 AM

before you've carked it, deceased......................
after the heart isn't beatin' and it's only darkness you see...
I could've carved you a feast,
weather or not you was tempted to eat...
amongst the ones who bring carnage with such remarkable ease...
to where it's often best you concede, no locked on target is freed...
I bet the truly ruthless conclude shit before the start of it's schemed...
I'm fuckin' armed to the teeth, a uno man army in movement...
I'll leave your carcass in pieces before the end of the read...

Not sure if subtle Heart of Darkness references?

This was nice. Wasn't forced at all, interesting/ unconventional rhymes that you weren't afraid to space out a bit. This made your drop feel relaxed and unassuming, but also hit really hard off the cuff. I liked it. I think your punctuation improved, and so did your delivery, since last time I read you.

Keep keyin Exis

07-23-2013, 08:10 AM	#14
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	before you've carked it, deceased...................... after the heart isn't beatin' and it's only darkness you see... I could've carved you a feast, weather or not you was tempted to eat... amongst the ones who bring carnage with such remarkable ease... to where it's often best you concede, no locked on target is freed... I bet the truly ruthless conclude shit before the start of it's schemed... I'm fuckin' armed to the teeth, a uno man army in movement... I'll leave your carcass in pieces before the end of the read... Not sure if subtle Heart of Darkness references? This was nice. Wasn't forced at all, interesting/ unconventional rhymes that you weren't afraid to space out a bit. This made your drop feel relaxed and unassuming, but also hit really hard off the cuff. I liked it. I think your punctuation improved, and so did your delivery, since last time I read you. Keep keyin Exis __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com