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Old 08-10-2015, 01:23 AM   #3
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this was pretty dope I thought, a random set of ideas brought together into frame
the way it flows is really natural and shows that you don't lack a creative thought
although a majority of the time your pieces come off as quickly jotted ideas that don't match up
you really took that and flipped that all on it's head with this one, there's a random assortment of ideas I liked

So on my first day in the oval office the people who actually control the presidency.. 'n the Congress.. can leave a picture in my presidential bedroom, of Kennedy's head-wound."

Tell me I'm off-topic. Another way I escape is by washing my hands over-n-over in the faucet. Meat on their bones- I don' even have skeletons in the closet. And when I touch myself too much, or use too many drugs, it feels like they're watching.

Syntax is my security-blanket. I wonder if there's a limit to how many characters I can put on these pages. Now that you know "my business" maybe I should leave forever(&while I'm at it)have a moderator erase this.


I really enjoyed this section, I edited out the part I could do without because this worked well
what it is I don't know, frustration, irritation, something along those lines..
at the end of the day you can just throw some random spurts of emotion into a piece and bring it full circle
I feel like a multitude of this shows when you put this out there and really sprung it forward
this was ubiquitous & really leaves a lasting impression, nice work dawg...keep it up
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