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[Adonis]

Ok, so the flow was butter... mostly. There were some simple errors which shined me off like "obstacle it you continue".. I know its a typo but when I read it its like I'm proof reading for errors for you because you did not. The other error was word choice, but that's not big because we have different slang and or ways of speech. Again, just over 3/4's flow was liquid. As for the story, I guess borded the line of unoriginal but they way you incorporate flow and cadence makes it breatheable and fun. I def thought for a sec the parents adoted athletes for money tho.

I've read better from you for sure, but don't hate this verse. In my case its hard to read and or write a linear story or narrative because I swear I've read them all. But like I said, your style is unique to me because its reads literally like you talking, whicch I love about youu.

Overall, well paced story that had very little I could hate. Above was me just nitpicking for sake of it.