Lack of Patience

InCizion · 05-26-2013, 02:05 PM

Our minds decapitation is a lack of patience
Strife is a relapse in cadence as we attack changes
Because were strapped hatin facts that’s adjacent
Hate is ancient, scathing at who acts complacent
Life’s arrangements get left fast in the basement
Fates detainments try to laugh & yet are trapped cases
Past the gates are all races, White, brown & black faces
The last grace is religion trying to dispatch its traces
Politicians are rats, evasive and will distract bases
Facts, and traces, erase cats who act persuasive
Some get clapped and faceless cast in rat mazes
Whacked & traceless, Tasteless crap will hack aces
Contracts and evasions collapsed to smack aimless
Tracked are our pages of bloody combats and races

SO NOW

The basics are missin and the racists are trippin
Rape is when a person’s mission will aid his vision
Paid is wisdom, get caught trippin, it’s a 8 bid in prison
It’s a waste kids are slippin, we’ve all faced its description
So craved kids listen! Or get encased with InCizions
Earth’s laced with prescriptions, hurt takes its inflictions
A cursed fate is friction so the curse rakes in addiction
The term bakes in his kitchen, worms, snakes & exorcisms
The Church makes commissions but is worth faiths envision
Fates indecision will dictate omission of misplaced ambition
Man’s fishin 4 truths subscription with his displaced mannerisms
That damned inner system is what’s at hand like winters chisim
Man will splinter victims & timber plans as the inventors of division
Mentors to fiction, tempers have risen, and now embers glisten

Mr. J · 05-26-2013, 03:15 PM

This was a very consistent piece, you kept the flow on point
and you really stuck to your subject matter, you got your word usage correct
I'm not a fan of centered pieces though..maybe it's just me...
either way this was sick from the beginning to the end to be honest
I thought the first part was slick, and the second added some flare to it
keep it up man

05-26-2013, 02:05 PM	#1
InCizion Junior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 27 Rep Power: 137477	Lack of Patience Our minds decapitation is a lack of patience Strife is a relapse in cadence as we attack changes Because were strapped hatin facts that’s adjacent Hate is ancient, scathing at who acts complacent Life’s arrangements get left fast in the basement Fates detainments try to laugh & yet are trapped cases Past the gates are all races, White, brown & black faces The last grace is religion trying to dispatch its traces Politicians are rats, evasive and will distract bases Facts, and traces, erase cats who act persuasive Some get clapped and faceless cast in rat mazes Whacked & traceless, Tasteless crap will hack aces Contracts and evasions collapsed to smack aimless Tracked are our pages of bloody combats and races SO NOW The basics are missin and the racists are trippin Rape is when a person’s mission will aid his vision Paid is wisdom, get caught trippin, it’s a 8 bid in prison It’s a waste kids are slippin, we’ve all faced its description So craved kids listen! Or get encased with InCizions Earth’s laced with prescriptions, hurt takes its inflictions A cursed fate is friction so the curse rakes in addiction The term bakes in his kitchen, worms, snakes & exorcisms The Church makes commissions but is worth faiths envision Fates indecision will dictate omission of misplaced ambition Man’s fishin 4 truths subscription with his displaced mannerisms That damned inner system is what’s at hand like winters chisim Man will splinter victims & timber plans as the inventors of division Mentors to fiction, tempers have risen, and now embers glisten Last edited by InCizion; 05-26-2013 at 02:10 PM.

05-26-2013, 03:15 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was a very consistent piece, you kept the flow on point and you really stuck to your subject matter, you got your word usage correct I'm not a fan of centered pieces though..maybe it's just me... either way this was sick from the beginning to the end to be honest I thought the first part was slick, and the second added some flare to it keep it up man __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you