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just sum spitten
I'm above the norm with my flawless form and
flow I'm gonna warn that the code was born this dope I'm vicious like the way a violent storm Corrodes So wicked you'll have sworn i got a set of horns bestowed I got the chicks so torn from clothes like some porno hoes They grab my dick to form an oh its a forceful blow I grab the torso slow contort her pose torque it close The vag explodes and covers the shaft with Loads Annd... I'm bad and seductive when i pen the pad I love it I'm rugged a weathered heart thats been stuffed in an oven n froze in the mountains and pummled by women Yet it still beats an eats up the venom im steadily Spittin Immune because ive been bitten by music and writtens Take a minute to listen its silently hissing at an audience Applaud to it drop the jaw and awe to it bow to Its presence Treasure the beautiful blessings it gives in mere Seconds... Last edited by Natural; 05-31-2013 at 02:03 AM. |
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05-26-2013, 03:39 PM
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Trash. Lol@a storm corroding. stopped reading after that. If u dont kno what the words mean dont just use them to rhyme, its infantile.
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05-26-2013, 03:59 PM
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K i read the rest. Super wack. This shit reads like dr suess had a wigger son who cant hold a rhythym or count syllables. An the words try to make it seem important. I hated it.
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05-26-2013, 04:05 PM
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The only advice i offered is to learn the meaning of the words u regurgitate on the web. If u want to write meaningless shit just ro rhyme, by all means....but ur tarnishing an art that used to have value b4 talentless faggits like u tried to bandwagon the craft.
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05-26-2013, 04:09 PM
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Lol. W/e
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05-26-2013, 04:11 PM
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Ur pinkslips up in disc forum.
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First verse flowed better but i enjoyed the second verse's content more.
Favs, I got the chicks so torn from clothes like someporno hoesThey grab my dick to form an oh its a forcefulblowI grab the torso slow contort her pose torqueit closeThe vag explodes and covers the shaft withLoads I'm bad and seductive when i pen the pad Ilove itI'm rugged a weathered heart thats been stuffedinan oven n froze in the mountains and pummled bywomenYet it still beats an eats up the venom im steadilySpittin
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05-28-2013, 02:56 PM
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This person is doing what I've done in the past.. and why Seyance did not like my writing.... I would stretch the meaning of the word.. Wich would not always work.. Some people forget that sometimes there's more than one meaning to a word.. but corroding weather is a stretch....
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