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Don't know mate expected more from you I didn't understand half of this maybe I'm missing something don't know mater just felt like I was hoping for more from a piece by someone like you don't know just felt like there were too many examples throughout this that had me guessing what was the underlying theme towards the end the piece became more complicated anyways just my take on it maybe I'm missing something but a lot of this felt inaccurate you could have been doper and I think you know that but thankyou for the read and hopefully more on the way just try to flush yourself out for the next one put some emphasis in your lines and I think it will feel more realistic
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