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![]() NBL Season 9 @Adverse @Plot
Due THURSDAY Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines Line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot You MUST vote on all battles & post your links in the Voting Thread Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls |
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What's good? I'm down for anything 12-16, let me know.
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Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse
And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin' Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket' Your time has come, dudes heckle him on site to get a rise out 'em But what's most ironic, you went from beefin' with Bags to being put inside of one. He went the name change route, trying to disguise this loser, but he botched So call me Orwell, the way I'm putting 'Dystopian future' in a 'plot' |
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You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker
Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator. You just live a shameful existence, so fuck those lies you spittin Ironic that your names Ad, when your sexlife consists of all + sized women. Fucking that fierce bitch, she's seriously burnt some men She gave me such an ugly tounge-lashing, I'll never unzip for her again. Packin angry heat, both gats wanna make you slouch Scram when these grumpy beasts pop outta the can, that's Oscar the Grouch. Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS. You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket. Last edited by Plot; 04-08-2016 at 04:28 AM. |
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Ad: fire wall, extension
Plot: Oscar the grouch All the quotes in Ads verse made me assume it was awful, but when I ignored them some of the concepts were quite nice. Plot had nice wording but simpler concepts. Vote = Ad |
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yo ad, lose those unnecessary quotations around ur shit, capitalize certain words if anything/if u absolutely have to, cuz they just take away from the overall impact of punches
but I gotta say ad pop up in ur window shit was fire australian open was dope too, could've been worded a bit better tho opener had mad potential but u didn't do enough w/ the concept vs imaginary lines was pretty decent plus sized women was simple but funny n worded well oscar the grouch had potential but it was worded soft, verse kinda fell off after that I gtg w/ ad here, he just had more firepower in the ones that hit v/adverse |
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Nice verse, surprised how great u dropped tbh. The last 2 bars were ineffective though.
versus Overall I have to give this to ADVERSE, his punches weren't crazy, but they did land well. |
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Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse
And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert the concept was good but this was way too short and simple, decent here You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you lose the quotation things, otherwise this was cool Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin' Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention lmaoooooo You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket' alright not bad, bars are funner when they aren't so obvious tho, hence why I say lose the quotations lol Your time has come, dudes heckle him on site to get a rise out 'em But what's most ironic, you went from beefin' with Bags to being put inside of one. too played man He went the name change route, trying to disguise this loser, but he botched So call me Orwell, the way I'm putting 'Dystopian future' in a 'plot' mmm idk it had potential but execution and wording was off Vs You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator. ok had potential for more but just too simple You just live a shameful existence, so fuck those lies you spittin Ironic that your names Ad, when your sexlife consists of all + sized women. multiple things goin on in here but none connected Fucking that fierce bitch, she's seriously burnt some men She gave me such an ugly tounge-lashing, I'll never unzip for her again. wasnt feelin this Packin angry heat, both gats wanna make you slouch Scram when these grumpy beasts pop outta the can, that's Oscar the Grouch. this could have been dope if done a lil differently Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS. nah You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket. ehh This was kinda one sided to me, I thought plot was a topical guy but he had some concepts just needed to execute them harsher or what not. Ad had some good sht just needs to drop the ''''''' stuff Vote Ad |
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Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse
And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert light cause most plot flips are done with him by now imo You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you solid wording but Mac and Windows have been used that way before. The Ad tie in was a nice touch. Don't need the quotes for us to understand imo Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin' Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention dope You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket' again don't need the quotes. Funny, decent Your time has come, dudes heckle him on site to get a rise out 'em But what's most ironic, you went from beefin' with Bags to being put inside of one. sorry bro Bags flips been done for years. The personal aspect of it makes me wanna like it but that's been done a lot thanks to Bag's He went the name change route, trying to disguise this loser, but he botched So call me Orwell, the way I'm putting 'Dystopian future' in a 'plot' about the same as the opener, I just seen it enough on him to know it's coming You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator. you're*. Solid concept You just live a shameful existence, so fuck those lies you spittin Ironic that your names Ad, when your sexlife consists of all + sized women. not really feeling the delivery though I like where it came from. Alright Fucking that fierce bitch, she's seriously burnt some men She gave me such an ugly tounge-lashing, I'll never unzip for her again. not really feeling it Packin angry heat, both gats wanna make you slouch Scram when these grumpy beasts pop outta the can, that's Oscar the Grouch. Lol cool Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS. there was a concept here but the vcr shit isn't really... Well fresh for me You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket. nope Imo Adverse had slightly better delivery. Thought it was closer than votes are showing right now, I only gave it to adverse cause the extension line was lotb. V/Adverse |
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Y? Better punches and material in general. Plot had a a lot of basic concepts that just wasn't hitting. The equator line was alright. And I've heard so many Oscar the grouch lines I cringed when I read it. |
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Adverse started cool with the first 3 bars then just totally fell apart after that
Plot had equator, oscar the grouch, take Ad out, and misconceptions Vote- plot |
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Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin' Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket' Plot You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator. Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS. You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket. Cool reads from both, but Adverse had more that I enjoyed. I dug the concept in Plot's closer, but the rhyme doesn't work great from me... do u have an accent that makes the slant rhyme work better? also, abortion bucket seems like a weird concept... maybe if you had've used talking gibberish/abortion clinics it would've landed harder, imo. v/ Adverse |
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@Adverse
Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert Didn't like the wording on this. To make sense it would just be like a spoiler. if you give say spoiler alert you give someone the chance to not get the spoiler lmao You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you that's wordplay. this was alright, kinda played out concept tho Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin' Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention lmao this was nice You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket' this wasn't hitting for me. shoud have just stuck with the previous two and moved on Your time has come, dudes heckle him on site to get a rise out 'em But what's most ironic, you went from beefin' with Bags to being put inside of one. Ok, ok He went the name change route, trying to disguise this loser, but he botched So call me Orwell, the way I'm putting 'Dystopian future' in a 'plot' at first i fucked with this, but what does the second meaning mean? what are you putting in plot? you're just giving him a dystopian future, and him alone? how can you do this without affecting your own livelihood. gotta think about these "plot" lines when you're writing battle rhymes man, this shit got levels @Plot You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator. the equator isn't imaginiary ... it's a line of reference You just live a shameful existence, so fuck those lies you spittin Ironic that your names Ad, when your sexlife consists of all + sized women. lmaoo liked this Fucking that fierce bitch, she's seriously burnt some men She gave me such an ugly tounge-lashing, I'll never unzip for her again. Fuh fuh filllller. Filler yeah Packin angry heat, both gats wanna make you slouch Scram when these grumpy beasts pop outta the can, that's Oscar the Grouch. idk, i've heard a lot of oscar the grouch lines so this wasn't hitting for me Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS. This is such an over the top analogy lmao. Why wouldn't you just say "coz im takin ad outta the show like my dvr". Keeps the rhyme and makes it so much more effective. You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket. hahahaha that wordplay. what is an abortion bucket? I think you have a misconception about missed conceptions plot made me laugh more but ad had a more effective verse V/ Adverse |
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