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david stern razor burns · 08-03-2014, 07:41 PM

Extremely enjoyable display of rhyming prowess. The metaphors describing the relentless ravaging of Dan's harlot of a sister were both creative, original and highly entertaining. For this being a Cypher it was most impressive. Keep up the excellent work, brother.

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 08:08 PM

i think this was dope. impressive rhyming, particularly in the first part.
IMO you should have put a space or dash between goosepimples ("goose pimples" or "goose-pimples") to help show the rhyme with "roots in her"..
"tweeter turns into the seashore" is a tongue twister, but i that's partly cuz i suck, so after a few tries it was OK... but those are minor issues, as i believe it was well done.

Wise Wiggles · 08-03-2014, 10:43 PM

Dope why bb banned niggas?

Eŋg · 08-05-2014, 03:37 PM

well yea this was how i expect you to write re: feed in your other piece.

your playful treatment of language can be a pleasure.

08-03-2014, 08:08 PM	#22
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	i think this was dope. impressive rhyming, particularly in the first part. IMO you should have put a space or dash between goosepimples ("goose pimples" or "goose-pimples") to help show the rhyme with "roots in her".. "tweeter turns into the seashore" is a tongue twister, but i that's partly cuz i suck, so after a few tries it was OK... but those are minor issues, as i believe it was well done. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-03-2014 at 08:15 PM.

08-03-2014, 10:43 PM	#23
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Dope why bb banned niggas? __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

08-03-2014, 07:41 PM	#21
david stern razor burns with razor spurs Join Date: Mar 2014 Location: At David Blaine's favorite place with David Spade and Macy Gray Posts: 87 Rep Power: 3750190	Extremely enjoyable display of rhyming prowess. The metaphors describing the relentless ravaging of Dan's harlot of a sister were both creative, original and highly entertaining. For this being a Cypher it was most impressive. Keep up the excellent work, brother.

08-05-2014, 03:37 PM	#24
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	well yea this was how i expect you to write re: feed in your other piece. your playful treatment of language can be a pleasure.