SpokenVsWritten Battle Verse

JESODIST · 07-31-2014, 08:33 PM

JESODIST

Every Night Before I fall asleep,
An Unseen Hand It Plots My Dreams,
A Half Seen Man He Talks To Me,
And Completely Plans These ***ophonies.
I Ask This Man What Are You Offering,
What Can You Offer Me, if I channel these Schemes,
You Have Taught To Me,
He Smiles Awfully, Laughs Haughtily And Then Screams.
You Are The Next Jesus, Horus, Buddha,
I know These Things Caz I see The future,
The Next Cudgel Used By a Crowd of Rulers,
To Keep People Lost in a Cloud of Confusion,
You Wont Be Seen By Souls Just Felt like Born From An Illusion.
The One Thing They Have Refused To Believe Few Stand Achieve and Must Never Understand,
Is The Supreme Fusion Between All things, From Nothing, To god Is A Man,
Some Would Say You're Animals But I don't Think it's So,
The Thing I find That Makes This True Is they can't sell Their souls.
I'll Spare You Feeble Shame, I'll Give you More Than Little Fame,
I'll Make You More Than a Household Little Name, I've Made it Plain,
Even Feel No Pain While You Dance In The Middle Of Flame,
So What Do you say? Do You Wish To Play My Little Game?...

I Awake Barely Breathing, What Was I Seeing?
Should I Be Believing I conversed with a Demon?
IS it a Gift Or Curse I'm Receiving?
These Disturbed Kind Of Feelings, Are An Absurd Way I'm Perceiving,
Somethings I've just Seen N Heard while I Was Profoundly sleeping,
The Explanation Preferred, IT'S Just Dreaming,
My Pores Are Bleeding Sores Are Healing,
The Repetition From That Source Infers,
IT Has More Than A Meaning.

DECAPITATOR
Top 15 will be 14 topless when Decap comes with
obnoxious rhyme concoctions of deadly toxins.
when inhaled, vital organs will fail,
every rhyme on point like a scorpions tail.
I already got the coffin and nails or would like to
have ya head on a Popsicle impaled?
your awfully frail to contend with a man beast,
Leave mc’s whiter the Klan sheets,
your technique is older then antiques,
I’ll ask who wants beef while my pan heats.
Let it cook and slept on ya knowledge like I dozed on a set of books,
and come sharper then a set of hooks to clip rooks.
You bitch kid are trash, my gats kick back will give em whip
lash, the sharp shit I kick will leave a big gash on
his bitch ass, I burst like egg sacks bustin out till
the chest cracks scattering extracts!
Enuff wit your cartoon shit, time to consume this bitch
and run through em like Harpoon tips, like typhoon clips.
your response is useless cuz the way my matrix is composed
It makes computers chips explode when i
processes the hard flow mixed with a c-4 cargo through
barcodes, stop ya hearts pulse and make niggas stand
still like yard gnomes, wit more styles then martial
arts know.
Lyrical villian My skull click be killin em, just another dumb simian
that’s gonna get ripped through his meridians by a sick reptilian.
words are sick I got hollow rounds per scared bitch,
And crush skulls at 1000 lbs per square inch,
You stand proud like a bitch with bare tits,
A circus clown that’s looks medium rare in a bears
grip, On point like hair picks in a spics bare fist that’ll
stab till I ventilated this scared kid,
My cranial lobe unloads a Draconian (alien reptile)
flow that’ll feel like Opuim smoke to this mc who
should host a nickelodeon show, not a formidable foe he
kicks nonsense,
That’s why my style is complex cuz no mc would adopt
the subject, I walk out of floating aeronautic metal objects,
spittin with hypnotic optics, with every word hits like
atomic rockets from cockpits of starships.
toppled the best this petty earth offered, so stop it and
Take this word of advice, I’ll murder this site with
such surgical strikes to wind pipes like OJ murdered
his wife, take heads and now your topless like the
convertible types, cut you like a blunt with a vertical
slice, and pull your spine out, now you’re classified
as invertebrate life!

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=77639
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=85021
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=67871

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gitto138 · 08-01-2014, 03:24 AM

This was a long enough piece, structures sound,
Flowed off the tongue nice,, was illustrative to a certain point, but couldn't see the story,,

UnbornBuddha · 08-02-2014, 04:26 AM

The verses did not mixed well. The collaboration almost seems as if its two different pieces altogether. I say this because of the content presented, it does not fit together. The first verse was more a narrative reflecting on the ghostly apparition, and their otherworldly cosmological representation. The last verse was more of a pompous showboating on the grandness of self.
Anyways, in terms of the content I think this was a nice read. I enjoyed the first verse more though. Decapitator's verse had a lack of substance, and originality.

07-31-2014, 08:33 PM	#1
JESODIST Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 309 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 976839	Spoken vs Battle JESODIST Every Night Before I fall asleep, An Unseen Hand It Plots My Dreams, A Half Seen Man He Talks To Me, And Completely Plans These **ophonies. I Ask This Man What Are You Offering, What Can You Offer Me, if I channel these Schemes, You Have Taught To Me, He Smiles Awfully, Laughs Haughtily And Then Screams. You Are The Next Jesus, Horus, Buddha, I know These Things Caz I see The future, The Next Cudgel Used By a Crowd of Rulers, To Keep People Lost in a Cloud of Confusion, You Wont Be Seen By Souls Just Felt like Born From An Illusion. The One Thing They Have Refused To Believe Few Stand Achieve and Must Never Understand, Is The Supreme Fusion Between All things, From Nothing, To god Is A Man, Some Would Say You're Animals But I don't Think it's So, The Thing I find That Makes This True Is they can't sell Their souls. I'll Spare You Feeble Shame, I'll Give you More Than Little Fame, I'll Make You More Than a Household Little Name, I've Made it Plain, Even Feel No Pain While You Dance In The Middle Of Flame, So What Do you say? Do You Wish To Play My Little Game?... I Awake Barely Breathing, What Was I Seeing? Should I Be Believing I conversed with a Demon? IS it a Gift Or Curse I'm Receiving? These Disturbed Kind Of Feelings, Are An Absurd Way I'm Perceiving, Somethings I've just Seen N Heard while I Was Profoundly sleeping, The Explanation Preferred, IT'S Just Dreaming, My Pores Are Bleeding Sores Are Healing, The Repetition From That Source Infers, IT Has More Than A Meaning. DECAPITATOR* Top 15 will be 14 topless when Decap comes with obnoxious rhyme concoctions of deadly toxins. when inhaled, vital organs will fail, every rhyme on point like a scorpions tail. I already got the coffin and nails or would like to have ya head on a Popsicle impaled? your awfully frail to contend with a man beast, Leave mc’s whiter the Klan sheets, your technique is older then antiques, I’ll ask who wants beef while my pan heats. Let it cook and slept on ya knowledge like I dozed on a set of books, and come sharper then a set of hooks to clip rooks. You bitch kid are trash, my gats kick back will give em whip lash, the sharp shit I kick will leave a big gash on his bitch ass, I burst like egg sacks bustin out till the chest cracks scattering extracts! Enuff wit your cartoon shit, time to consume this bitch and run through em like Harpoon tips, like typhoon clips. your response is useless cuz the way my matrix is composed It makes computers chips explode when i processes the hard flow mixed with a c-4 cargo through barcodes, stop ya hearts pulse and make niggas stand still like yard gnomes, wit more styles then martial arts know. Lyrical villian My skull click be killin em, just another dumb simian that’s gonna get ripped through his meridians by a sick reptilian. words are sick I got hollow rounds per scared bitch, And crush skulls at 1000 lbs per square inch, You stand proud like a bitch with bare tits, A circus clown that’s looks medium rare in a bears grip, On point like hair picks in a spics bare fist that’ll stab till I ventilated this scared kid, My cranial lobe unloads a Draconian (alien reptile) flow that’ll feel like Opuim smoke to this mc who should host a nickelodeon show, not a formidable foe he kicks nonsense, That’s why my style is complex cuz no mc would adopt the subject, I walk out of floating aeronautic metal objects, spittin with hypnotic optics, with every word hits like atomic rockets from cockpits of starships. toppled the best this petty earth offered, so stop it and Take this word of advice, I’ll murder this site with such surgical strikes to wind pipes like OJ murdered his wife, take heads and now your topless like the convertible types, cut you like a blunt with a vertical slice, and pull your spine out, now you’re classified as invertebrate life! http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=77639 http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=85021 http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=67871 FEED LINKS FROM THE HOMIES Last edited by JESODIST; 08-01-2014 at 07:09 PM. Reason: Better Structure

08-01-2014, 03:24 AM	#2
gitto138 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Location: BITER Posts: 138 Battle Record: BITER Rep Power: 0	This was a long enough piece, structures sound, Flowed off the tongue nice,, was illustrative to a certain point, but couldn't see the story,,

08-02-2014, 04:26 AM	#3
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	The verses did not mixed well. The collaboration almost seems as if its two different pieces altogether. I say this because of the content presented, it does not fit together. The first verse was more a narrative reflecting on the ghostly apparition, and their otherworldly cosmological representation. The last verse was more of a pompous showboating on the grandness of self. Anyways, in terms of the content I think this was a nice read. I enjoyed the first verse more though. Decapitator's verse had a lack of substance, and originality.