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Talk about being specific. Always leave out the details, bleeding terrific. Walking on clouds of this Elysium blister. Keep beating the cymbals. Eating my fingers while I'm feeding this pistol.. Whispering to the evenless crystals, seemingly blissful. My feet are popcicles. Synchronized lullabies of a Freezing carnival. This evening rendezvous. I'm fiending your longitude. Wheezing the thought of you. A medium to talk me through.
I'm a vegetable, wasted. Off medical hazes. Electric oasis. It's best to roll naked. Professional raver. I sweat in strobe-lasers. Mind-dickin' bitches, Professor Xavier. Nitrous whip-it's & impressions of Vader. No one gave me a conscious. I'm blatantly honest, it's all cradles & coffins. Chasing is awesome. I love playing with zombies. Labia monster. Patient, just watching Megan & Scarlett bathing & washing. I'm taking a hostage. Freebasing this knowledge. Pale as vodka. My favorite place is the Bates' in autumn My name is Wise, & I'm a binge drinking piece of shit Rinse sequence, repeat the gig. Been sleeping where demons live Tin squeaking & bleeding slicks Dial 911 if my raps appear loopy I might swallow a slug like an atmosphere groupie I'm plastered dear, shoot me. The chandelier's moving For little reason. Lately I've just been reading Recluse & Black Fuck the thinking- do a dab Drilling questions into your mucus slab, illusions catch Soooo uhhh... Has it all been a lie? Chilling, watching fall winterize Looking for drugs to pick you up. Must'a called enterprise just breathe, steam heads got the moisture rising you're more divine than eyedea's unrecorded writing why force the silence? I squint under coral lighting spit's disgusting, demoralizing oral hygiene The cable or string? I'll show you the ropes, but take it from me. They know to pay close attention when I make us a drink. S'like my mind's set & can't seem to leave it alone The time card? Won't be punching that until Pita is home I need a change A sense of direction. Some where to place my own focus If I didn't call any friends? How long would it take'em ta'notice? You're my dream, angel. Like looking at you more than real angles I know you've been out ...here, a nice 2x4 between ankles You ever feel crazy? But not know how crazy to feel Be glad your hands aren't the ones taped to the wheel Saltine wounds. A zombie who's life has been a faulty 'chute Starved. Reduced. Choppy tuned cello, No hello's from the odd recluse. Only close the door, Lock. Regroup.. Not even a party n00b. Has not seen boobs Or felt the rush an angel's touch leaves you with I stunt stealthy. Complexion: unhealthy Suns heavenly.plexy grip & sexy lips Expensive memories. Contemplating marriage Chasing sheriff. Head-casing scared of's Ive been places/! Where? Was.. everything two-thirds treasure, one part clutter Water colored Molly lovers, lost when massage discovered (Oh my gosh) Tropic thunder. Life's a movie. I am ruined Getting HEATED at this stupid temp- the ice is drooling Lights are moving sporadically. Bored, tapping knee. The shore's mad at me. We divorce. Smash & leave Ever seen a Portland bag of weed? The crystals cake around the sides Cliffnotes hanging down from 'cides Dismal angels frowned & sighed The window gazing clowns arrived Yes, you may purchase now. It's sniffles & sluts That bottle will answer your dreams? Give it a rub All my friends are sheep in this shepard's pie The wingless will never fly Ppl are always like Wise, you're pretty sloppy You're yellow driveway bloody- where's Dorothy's body? She HAD IT COMING! the fucking whore did my Molly ! :/ That's more than just sort of a problem! :| I need my shit. I NEED IT. This fucking Portland is rotting I drive a honda civic. NOT a fucking Porsche or Ferrari Movies. Italian Job? I'd like to score- hit a robbery Smash Charlize from the back; on all fours, like a doggy Fairy-tale Vegas wedding, get divorced in the lobby I wakeboard on tapeworms. Rape germs Not healthy. I walk melting, my leg burns I love Nature. Space. Earth. Change. Birth. Frayed skirt. Yo bitch can play nurse. Blaze tracer. Lasers. Does my brain work? Insane verse? You spray words? I spray curse Grey blurbs of which bitch ima chase first drinking's bad, but yay's worse.. Shrinking bags just pace worse Don't know if I'm missing my chance.. Or miss someone The kid's undone. Sniff, numb. Wonder if this summer'll Be the end of my world. Guy/girl. S'all fun & games til the price curl Eyes twirl. Show me that sky plur The eiffel's burnt down. Ashes spread. Disaster-head. How bad does bad get? Hatchet red. Michael found where the mask is kept. Casket debts. Your gasoline dreams match the bed That's your save me face? Like where's the time machine? Lightening? & Dashboard 88 Misery & sore spots..How glittery is your box? She's dirty, literally no Listerine or Clorox A mystery like Fort Knox.. Blisters bleed the pore rot I'm jittery as she flicks her bean to 'Gore drops She likes the sweat. Amber Heard. A silver dress When our eye's connect? Cannon burst on Skrillex set When that occurs? Planet Earth? A billion dead Bear trap. Clark Kent. Tickles.. As I stare at arsenic symbols. When the air's black, stars bend. Like where that spark went? Dwindle.
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I'm a vegetable, wasted. Off medical hazes. Electric oasis. It's best to roll naked. Professional raver. I sweat in strobe-lasers. Mind-dickin' bitches, Professor Xavier. Nitrous whip-it's & impressions of Vader.
nastyyyyy I might swallow a slug like an atmosphere groupie dug this, lol Has it all been a lie? Chilling, watching fall winterize thought this was ill as fuck A sense of direction. Some where to place my own focus If I didn't call any friends? How long would it take'em ta'notice? You're my dream, angel. Like looking at you more than real angles I know you've been out ...here, a nice 2x4 between ankles You ever feel crazy? But not know how crazy to feel Be glad your hands aren't the ones taped to the wheel raw asss segment. love this Smash Charlize from the back; on all fours, like a doggy me to. mmmmmmmm the rest was a cool array of multies but didnt stand out as much as the qouted lines. dope work my G. rather long compared to most of your pieces that ive seen in a while. but thats ok.. needed this read from you. 1
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Long as fuck but lots of quotables. Impressions of vader made me chuckle, fuckin whip its.
Life been a faulty chute was dope too. On my phone so I'm just thinking off the top, but yeah I liked this, always a pleasure to see you rhyme.
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immense. i was waiting for you to drops something like this.
I'm a vegetable, wasted. Off medical hazes. Electric oasis. It's best to roll naked. Professional raver. I sweat in strobe-lasers. Mind-dickin' bitches, Professor Xavier. Nitrous whip-it's & impressions of Vader. No one gave me a conscious. I'm blatantly honest, it's all cradles & coffins My name is Wise, & I'm a binge drinking piece of shit Rinse sequence, repeat the gig. Been sleeping where demons live Tin squeaking & bleeding slicks Dial 911 if my raps appear loopy I might swallow a slug like an atmosphere groupie I'm plastered dear, shoot me. The chandelier's moving damn. you're more divine than eyedea's unrecorded writing I need a change A sense of direction. Some where to place my own focus If I didn't call any friends? How long would it take'em ta'notice? thats rough. the final segment was consistent and fun to read. a little sad but you channel it into really dope rhyme work. nothing that matched the knockout capacity of the above quoted lines imo. i think its clear that you could use a change of scenery. sounds like your lifestyle is catching up fast, or whatever you're using to get away isn't letting you go. so be it do what you have to do. the toughest part is always starting. hope you keep writing. thanks 1
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Best thing I've read in months.
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This is awesome
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some dope shit here wise.
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This was so amazing, very creative piece of work!
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Yoooo, even though I dont always feed your pieces I always read them. This is definitely hov material. Epicness man. I'll try to get to a computer to drop some quotes when I can but you get the hof nod from me and I never vote for pieces. Props
Rtf on mine and vivids piece if you dont mind
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ha, i knew this was a collection of works mashed together! that part i quoted from ur old sig is flat out ridiculous. clean. its cool that u can write so many small bits and they are able to connect and all make sense/hold the same meanings/thoughts themes. this worked altogether as one piece, it didn't come across as fragmented or forced together. obviously the different bits of scheming are sick. content gross, cold, grey, gritty real. portland. haha so much portland. cool shit man. very wise obv. quite personal/real. i like this better than just rapping about flat out murdering and raping bitches. another unique drop as usual (if that makes sense?) really good bruth, keep em comin
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I read it
Prolly the best stuff I peeped from u in a bit.....granted I don't check you ....or even this section consistently...so take it for what it is. This was good tho |
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All my friends are sheep in this shepard's pie
Synchronized lullabies of a Freezing carnival. This evening rendezvous. I'm fiending your longitude. Wheezing the thought of you. A medium to talk me through. ^^both brilliant man. ace. real good drop. I liked the whole train of thought even as it ran itself out on grandma and her four cats. some more quotes i could ass to the above two, but those were just the main highlights where the rhythm and concepts crescendoed. Watching fall winterize was cool too, but i've totally thought that thought before so i wasnt TOO impressed with it. Lel dope shit wise. hope your world isnt rotting away IRL PM me lines. Or ill pm you lines. lets get something kicking. im gonna take initiative by tomorrow afternoon prolly tho
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Wow. I always love your drops Wise, this shit was on point!
Also, that atmosphere line yo, fuckin loved it Loved the labia monster part too. Lemme ask you, are these bits and pieces of writing or did you sit down after one rough patch of experiences in your life and just start writing? I've just always been fascinated with how you string the ideas altogether in an impressive rhyming pattern |
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Bits and pieces, darling. Appreciate all the reads and replies everyone.
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