Visions 3

Mitch · 03-20-2014, 06:03 PM

Consuming the gloomy loom of doom horizon,
improvising the simple life alignment.
Ruby fumes in my roomy tomb soon to boom, climbing
the shooter tubes, blooming 'hues', What 'wears' 'wise' when
one clue of attire's a spool that'll spiral
a trace of it's truth from the 'spire'.
I'm cooped in confinement, aloof of the liars,
choosing to chafe till the spooks have aspired to spooking the spiders.
confused where the sirens are moving 'till silence.
losing my mind just to prove what my mind is.
I am a rubix cube, super glue binding a diamond core.
i am more than mutual, myriad experienced.
a billion bent spoons in a super bowl clearance sale.
sundance trance with a Sunday seance seeress clear as a splitting cloud spitting hail.
Spinning out of control with the polar flipping out its mimiced self.
selling ships assail a doubt of drought big enough to tip the scale.

e11even · 03-21-2014, 05:21 AM

holy shit. alliteration meets compounded imagery within a sick set of rhyme cadances. This danced. I liked how playful this felt while still delivering enough to make you want to take the messages seriously. I liked this piece. Drop more like this.

03-20-2014, 06:03 PM	#1
Mitch Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Location: Canada Posts: 160 Rep Power: 2208351	Visions 3 Consuming the gloomy loom of doom horizon, improvising the simple life alignment. Ruby fumes in my roomy tomb soon to boom, climbing the shooter tubes, blooming 'hues', What 'wears' 'wise' when one clue of attire's a spool that'll spiral a trace of it's truth from the 'spire'. I'm cooped in confinement, aloof of the liars, choosing to chafe till the spooks have aspired to spooking the spiders. confused where the sirens are moving 'till silence. losing my mind just to prove what my mind is. I am a rubix cube, super glue binding a diamond core. i am more than mutual, myriad experienced. a billion bent spoons in a super bowl clearance sale. sundance trance with a Sunday seance seeress clear as a splitting cloud spitting hail. Spinning out of control with the polar flipping out its mimiced self. selling ships assail a doubt of drought big enough to tip the scale. __________________ Soundcloud.com/TheDirtySerpent

03-21-2014, 05:21 AM	#2
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	holy shit. alliteration meets compounded imagery within a sick set of rhyme cadances. This danced. I liked how playful this felt while still delivering enough to make you want to take the messages seriously. I liked this piece. Drop more like this. __________________ Ahem.