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The trap is set, it's time for them to lead the way with blazing guns
with Peach as bait, Luigi stayed, concealed, in wait to take the plunge he'd raid the front.. his brother watched the rear incase the soldiers got thru gawping at the slaughtered corpses weirdly lay near molten rock pools eerily displayed remains of all of those who came alone those who solely failed to break the reign and boldly take the throne strangely though, such sights that might deter the sane - astounding them! meant nothing to the brothers - their perverted brains were round the bend!! surrounding them were crowds ready to pounce, preventing loss of life the docile guards are toppled, but protection round the boss is rife! so once they've got inside and shot his guys with gauges, Glocks & nines they'll off his wife inside his office whilst he's made to watch her die see, in the past the twins were slinging crack back on the Kingdom streets before THIS sting was planned, back when they lacked that competition streak the kids could eat and life was great, until King Bowsers 'rise to fame' he'd thrown a spanner in the works, suffice to say that times had changed the once blue sky was grey, the nights were plagued with clouds of dusty smoke as fires raged & plowed thru dusk lit homes which housed the Mushroom folk the rustic roads were littered with remains of those who fought to live still, mothers called their kids, distraught... a thought that's sure to haunt the twins "look.. something ought to give, the thought of this for life is crazy bro" "So let's go raid his home! - we'll torture him & fight to take control his trade could make us loads - the client base worth twice our weight in gold!!" we'll find what ace he holds & break his soul - this time we'll make him fold!! and so .... they vowed to make a stand & crush skulls for his drug stash they'll reclaim the land until the plug's pulled in this blood bath it's a basic plan to rake in grands - give & supply fiends whilst being widely seen as heroes - they'll be living the pipe dream |
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I stopped reading at Luigi
Grow up u haiku hugging homosexer
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lmao i actually did a piece not entirely dissimilar to this way back, 2009ish
i think it may be up at RM in the RSTL i keyed a lot of it so the lines are entirely too long but i cant hate
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![]() Hey Chico Menendez BumFluffTash Juan Carlito Pacitto Tortilla Silva! (That's your name, right?) Are you going to accept my callout or would you prefer to stand in my shadow all day? If you battle me, I swear I'll supply your mother and her 37 children with a life time supply of Burritos. No shit! How's that for an incentive? Lars - you know you gotta dig that out now lol |
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i found a link to where i re-posted it at RB but there server seems to be down
it started with "Mama Mia!" and Mario waking up drunk, he was old and fat and broke and an alcoholic but still working as a plumber
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Haha the reality behind a legend. Pity you can't find it
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Lars' key is better than Saila Moon's life.
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Please refrain from addressing me in any way, shape, or form. Don't you have a Buddha statue to be masturbating over? Be gone
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This was nice. Obviously you are comfortable with your lyricism and just as experienced as anyone around here. The subject matter was somewhat corny; the saving grace had to be the buttery rhyme scheme. At times, it got a bit expected...where it would rhyme and how it would rhyme. The story itself and the progression was still solid.
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Thank you kind sir.
The verse was for a topical battle, with the topic being 'Mario & Luigi are drug lords'. |
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This is take two: I dug this drop from a urban gamer's perspective. All the grit that should be in a story based video-game-to-crime-movie adaptation in rhyme format was present. From a writer's perspective, nothing special jumped out content-wise aside from your consistent, albeit rigid, rhyme structure. For an (almost) advocate against rhyming altogether(ironically), I can still appreciate when a flow is done right. Great job overall. This was good for what it was. I look forward to reading more drops in your style.
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Much appreciated on the feed. Thanks for taking time out to read this and give your honest opinion :-)
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!!! for emphasis, obv beta |
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