Fortune Teller

[jdeek]

I'm patient, but I'm achin' to spit it. I gotta spray it
just to get it out the way 'cause it's decayin' my pages, OK?

Never complacent. My species' been endangered
by strangers that's spittin' feces. Never matchin my thesis.
Beastly characteristics in characters that I'm piecin' together.
I'm packin' letters to flatten those packin' pieces.
Emptyin' vocal clips, to bury a hopeful's wish,
to ever be dope as shit. I'm ending it. Over with.
Fallin' from the heavens to go 'n hit 'em with scrypts.
Descending from open rifts from the solar system 'n shit.
Potent visions depicted wit' vivid description.
Rippin' these bitches to slivered strips 'n inflictin' inner confliction'.
Alterin' all decisions and ambitions to diss 'em.
The man's lips are drippin venom. He's ready to come 'n kiss 'em.
Poisonous. Destroyin' this by deployin' this boisterous
voice in this choice of music I'm usin' for my enjoyment
when I

Hit 'em with a flow, that'll make 'em lose breath
Ill, yet so chill. I'mma give 'em gooseflesh.
Tarot card reader, and for you I choose death.
But that's all that's in the deck, and you knew it.
Who's next
x2

Wreck it wit' what I'm pennin' again and sendin' a message
that you shouldn't test it, 'less you want stretchers and paramedics
attendin' all ya addresses wit' stethoscopes to ya chest's 'n
checkin' ya vitals. Findin' you dyin' from what I'm sketchin'.
Check it.
The guys pretendin' they ride or dyin' with methods of lyin'
find out in seconds what rhymin's bout when I step in-
side of the booth and tell 'em I ain't ridin' like a felon,
but I'll drown 'em in the flow. Like homocidal Magellan.
The gel in my pen'll freeze you. Have you on pins and needles
and panickin' when you see you can't even manage to breathe.
Realizin' the hook's holdin' more truth than you imagined
as you eye'n patterns flashin'. Feelin' ya air retractin'.
Lungs gettin' to spazzin' as your vision's goin' black.
You start reachin' to-wards Saturn. Beggin' God fo' his actions.
But no one's gonna save you from grabbin' ya chest,
collapsin' and dyin' in satisfaction 'cause that's what the fuck'll happen
when I

Hit 'em with a flow, that'll make 'em lose breath
Ill, yet so chill. I'mma give 'em gooseflesh.
Tarot card reader, and for you I choose death.
But that's all that's in the deck, and you knew it.
Who's next
x2


had the hook on another verse that i never got around to finishing...like it better here anyway.

[jdeek]

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=2969
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=3884
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=42
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=43631

i'll feed more on monday...just about done work 'n i wanted to drop this before i'm outta here.

[zygote]

Some excellent aggressive lines but also some less good parts as well. E.g., "Wreck it wit' what I'm pennin' again and sendin' a message
that you shouldn't test it, 'less you want stretchers and paramedics" - that part was great but the following two lines had a mediocre rhyme scheme compared to the rest. Also, strangely enough enjoyed the different apostrophes, usually something like that can be annoying but at least you were consistent to give it some different visual quality. Also liked this part how the line ended halfway through the sentence "Poisonous. Destroyin' this by deployin' this boisterous
voice in this choice of music I'm usin' for my enjoyment." The homicidal Magellan was also a creative one liner, more like that would have been good, more different simple comparisons and eclectic references to make it more interesting like your other best parts.

[Natural]

Ayo
To me this was dope. I've always liked that you are able to hold a supurb flow throughout a piece.
Very good scheming too if you ask me....not too easy to achieve.
If I had to point out one negative it would be the content....seems like you went ape shit rhyming in its place.

My favorite part was:
Poisonous. Destroyin' this by deployin' this boisterous voice in this choice of music I'm usin' for my enjoyment when I
↑That was dope as fuck

[Exis]

This is pretty nice man...your flow is butter for the most part, first section especially seems to just roll off the tongue quite effortlessly imo.I like the tone of the piece while readin' it, has that don't give a fuck vibe which allowed for me personally to have an enjoyable read...a few sections were a little iffy but all in all this is solid bro.

Stay up with it.

[Geno]

Nice to see you again bro

Thought this was ill. Had some dope schemes in it. I likee the change in sstyle you kept hittin us with. Made it exciting. The content was fierce, was digin the way you attacked it man. Looks like it may possibly go audio, would love to hear.

[Vulgar]

Never complacent. My species' been endangered
by strangers that's spittin' feces. Never matchin my thesis.
Beastly characteristics in characters that I'm piecin' together.
I'm packin' letters to flatten those packin' pieces.
Emptyin' vocal clips, to bury a hopeful's wish,
to ever be dope as shit. I'm ending it. Over with.
^Smooth flow like this was prevalent throughout the piece.

The content was convincing, the opening scheme above was the right way to open up and set the tone. I thought the chorus was alright. I can't say I know what gooseflesh is, currently. Cool stuff though, it's not every day you see audio-ready lyrics and solid ones at that.