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Old 10-22-2013, 11:13 AM   #1
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Default The Famicon Brothers

there was a plumber and his brother, working extra slow,
having a bummer of a summer in New Mexico,
other workers had gone home, they were next to go,
finally they could head east and have some pizza, cooked by professionals,
then one day while on a call, to fix a leak,
they met a woman from Georgia, that seemed out of their reach,
but she was friendly and said lets meet again to speak,
so one of the brothers convinced the other, to stay a few more weeks,
they hung out a bunch of times, the relationship bloomed,
went to hippie festivals and ate mushrooms,
always had fun together, used to race go carts,
until someone became jealous and tried to pull them apart,
this other guy was a monster, always took what he pleased,
and what he wanted was the girl to fulfill his needs,
this troubled the plumber, caused him great dismay,
what if this fiend was successful in trying to steal her away,
and to make matters worse, he was twice his size,
what chance did he stand?, if he had to fight this guy,
so he trained until he could break bricks with his hands,
and practiced parkour traversing dangerous lands,
playing capture the flag, it really started to add up,
he got a lot bigger, and actually began to feel tough,
but this attention to getting stronger, left the girl abandoned,
so she sought solace in the other man's mansion,
the plumber was so mad, he kicked his pet turtle in a damn tantrum,
then said "Lets a go!" and began advancing,
when he got to the house, he was on a mission,
and easily evaded the security system,
went up to the window and started to listen,
the girl said she wanted to leave but was being imprisoned,
so he burst through the door without even trying,
the other guy took out a gun and started firing,
there was no where to go, no where to hide,
so the plumber used his parkour, zig zagging side to side,
didn't run away, he ran towards the heathen instead,
knocked him down and stomped on his head until he was dead,
took the girl by the hand, said you will always be mine,
and treated her like a princess ever since that moment in time
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Old 10-22-2013, 11:15 AM   #2
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Old 10-22-2013, 02:17 PM   #3
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Pretty dope reiteration of a classic
really enjoyed how you played with the concept
gave it an other worldly feel that's original
flow was on point for the most part...sick drop
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