communication (the poet)

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Cognition initiates, thought process facilitated
the seminal integration of silence and demonstration.
Pilot of revelation, maneuvering beautifully
in a craft of vibrant vibrations and syntactical fluency
soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.
Sonic ricochets bouncing off as a spiral to then conjoin
in a poignant and focused movement of vortex to cortex
that spasms in warm flexes. Emphatic passions employed
in the passive, lacking, and void. Sporadic cracking
of data, synapses passing and flickering harmonies
sparks anomalies. Fully throttled and bottling novelty
swallowed audibly; Altering all your knowledge enjoyed...
The tactical noise... a matter in a fractalling voice.
To keep you captured in its pattern is its factor of choice.


This is my motif; hieroglyphically flowing
and tapping average perceptions; influence with cups of coding.
Motivating its holding; its gritty gripping and groping,
or possibly just a ploy to invoke the feelings I'm posing.
I dare to go,
lower than the lowest of baritones
then rhythm rip recipients just to see, can they bear the tone?
Switch to bragadocious bravado coddling bravo's.
In either fashion, I traffic attraction likened to pheramones.
From parables of life to a parallel demonstration
of my dick length in terms of the track of train stations
or the holy flow bestowed upon the mass as im preachin
and every word i speak is just about as buoyant as Jesus.
Relation. Corruption. Imagery invasive or touching.
Pumping of vocal vigoroso in perfect place with percussion.
A funktified rhetorician invested in self reflection
then finding the diction fit enough to show you the vision. Perfected.

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"syntactical fluency" was dope. you remind me of another writer who just quit topicals.

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Rakim? Yeah its me.

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did Rakim really quit?!

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Upping. Fed most of the site diss pieces.

Will rtf

[Coup]

good use of vocab to strengthen this piece and weaken it so to speak...flow was on point...really liked this line as it stood out for me:

soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.

the word choices were good for the brain chemistry you were relating too. props...verse two expanded a bit on how you muster your revelry or spits...felt greasy in some points and strong in others...


The way I see it, using those Oxford words as rhyme pieces really gives a written a twista presentation due to the syl. count....just a thought


anyhow, sometimes I have deeper thoughts that cover other areas of writing on a feed, sometimes not...today these are my thoughts

peace

[Advocate]

This was really strong! Like Coup said I really feel as though the vocab you used really brought out the strength of the content you had wrote. You were very descriptive and that also brought it out to life. You had a good use of metaphors and ya flow was pretty dope. I like the part when you said,

"Motivating its holding; its gritty gripping and groping,
or possibly just a ploy to invoke the feelings I'm posing.
I dare to go,
lower than the lowest of baritones
then rhythm rip recipients just to see, can they bear the tone?"

This was a good drop, I liked it.

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Thx @Coup @Advocate

Ill get to yall tomorrow

[Dove Dozer]

I liked this. such a deep vocab on this. It was dope.

"Pilot of revelation, maneuvering beautifully
in a craft of vibrant vibrations and syntactical fluency
soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.."

I really liked this bit here... just a great syllable count and it made the flow perfect. rolled off the tongue.

but then with..

"Sonic ricochets bouncing off as a spiral to then conjoin"

I thought that line didn't work as well like the wording just felt wrong where "as a spiral..." came in .. I dunno.. Im just picky on shit, so I dont feed that often. lol, just so I don't sound like an ass all the time lol.. anyhow this was pretty dope all the way through.. vocab, multies etc. technically this was spot on. content was ill.

holler

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Cognition initiates, thought process facilitated
the seminal integration of silence and demonstration.
> really strong vocabulary, but "seminal" was a word I hadn't seen in awhile, and the context didnt really reveal the meaning of the word to me, implying you could've worded it better or the word wasnt really key. "Facilitated" was a weird rhyme

Pilot of revelation, maneuvering beautifully
in a craft of vibrant vibrations and syntactical fluency
>loved this bar
soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.
Sonic ricochets bouncing off as a spiral to then conjoin
> you're describing the process of speech beautifully here
in a poignant and focused movement of vortex to cortex
that spasms in warm flexes. Emphatic passions employed
in the passive, lacking, and void. Sporadic cracking
>really strong transitions, think maybe your not being as direct as you could be
of data, synapses passing and flickering harmonies
sparks anomalies. Fully throttled and bottling novelty
swallowed audibly; Altering all your knowledge enjoyed...
The tactical noise... a matter in a fractalling voice.
To keep you captured in its pattern is its factor of choice.
>I think you got too caught up in your rhyme scheme here, the wording was strange to me


This is my motif; hieroglyphically flowing
and tapping average perceptions; influence with cups of coding.
>coding/ codeine I see u. Motif is a unique word that could've been exploited JS
Motivating its holding; its gritty gripping and groping,
or possibly just a ploy to invoke the feelings I'm posing.
>naw didn't like this
I dare to go,
lower than the lowest of baritones
then rhythm rip recipients just to see, can they bear the tone?
Switch to bragadocious bravado coddling bravo's.
In either fashion, I traffic attraction likened to pheramones.
From parables of life to a parallel demonstration
of my dick length in terms of the track of train stations
or the holy flow bestowed upon the mass as im preachin
and every word i speak is just about as buoyant as Jesus.
>dope
Relation. Corruption. Imagery invasive or touching.
Pumping of vocal vigoroso in perfect place with percussion.
A funktified rhetorician invested in self reflection
then finding the diction fit enough to show you the vision. Perfected

This was overall attention-grabbing but very rambling. Cool free association piece. Strong wording with bad delivery at times, if that makes sense. It'll get more and more polished the more you write. I strongly enjoyed the style

[Eŋg]

ease up on the vocabulary. a vast lexical base is more effectively flaunted when utilized sparingly. to lambast the reader with superfluous expressions is not only conceited, it means the art of being succinct is entirely lost. being (relatively) brief, and also concise, is among the most reverential of acts an anglophile can achieve. problem is, as i know quite intimately, he'll be occupied chewing over polysyllables and obscurity.

preamble aside, i certainly liked parts of this, others not so much. i had an apparent problem with your execution, but this was probably an isolated exercise for you. you show promise, just take something away from my first paragraph, saving that, it's first sentence.

pz

[Rojo187]

Originally Posted by oXus

ease up on the vocabulary. a vast lexical base is more effectively flaunted when utilized sparingly. to lambast the reader with superfluous expressions is not only conceited, it means the art of being succinct is entirely lost. being (relatively) brief, and also concise, is among the most reverential of acts an anglophile can achieve. problem is, as i know quite intimately, he'll be occupied chewing over polysyllables and obscurity.

preamble aside, i certainly liked parts of this, others not so much. i had an apparent problem with your execution, but this was probably an isolated exercise for you. you show promise, just take something away from my first paragraph, saving that, it's first sentence.

pz

this...having a good vocab is good n all but the point is to communicate effectively and esp with free association rhymes you gotta be clear on your topic to the point that the vocab enhances but doesn't define the verse...

tone it down then you def can drop some good shyt...

[Vulgar]

fuuuuck this was filthy.

Cognition initiates, thought process facilitated
the seminal integration of silence and demonstration.
Pilot of revelation, maneuvering beautifully
in a craft of vibrant vibrations and syntactical fluency
Good opening.

soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.
Sonic ricochets bouncing off as a spiral to then conjoin
in a poignant and focused movement of vortex to cortex
that spasms in warm flexes. Emphatic passions employed
in the passive, lacking, and void. Sporadic cracking
of data, synapses passing and flickering harmonies
sparks anomalies. Fully throttled and bottling novelty
swallowed audibly; Altering all your knowledge enjoyed...
The tactical noise... a matter in a fractalling voice.
To keep you captured in its pattern is its factor of choice.
^Great breakdown of "communication" in general, last bar was slick.

I dare to go,
lower than the lowest of baritones
then rhythm rip recipients just to see, can they bear the tone?
Switch to bragadocious bravado coddling bravo's.
In either fashion, I traffic attraction likened to pheromones.
^Ill.

Relation. Corruption. Imagery invasive or touching.
Pumping of vocal vigoroso in perfect place with percussion.
A funktified rhetorician invested in self reflection
then finding the diction fit enough to show you the vision. Perfected.
^Suggestion: "to show you the vision in its perfection*"

either way it works. You should consider turning this into an audio with a Pete Rock/CL Smooth type of beat or something smooth sounding like that. Very impressed.

Keep doing you

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