me: *writes godly stuff all the time* certain: I'm not fazed, I hang around bb all day I don't see what the big deal is anyway, you're just plain old bb to me)

[big baby]

A brief bespoken life, demon. Cloaked in fire. The blood I bleed's like open geysers that seep through opal fibers, the meek, unsocial guy who speaks in vocal highs. The way I see the homeless, I'm perceived as a hopeless. Lye is the caustic solution of sodium hydroxide, the agnostic illusion, I'm a caustic solution, stand on podiums in mach drive. The diagnostic is simple, woeful. And riddled. Pledge to locusts when you're approaching the god. The sharp knifes edge is focal, cause that's the point I'm focusing on. Devoted islamists, see my devotion to self, by noticing the way my chakra points open and melt through my epidermis, the welts are scars like in fight club. I'll suck the blood out of the leech that it sucked in, it's only after we've lost everything that we're free to do nothing. I sometimes flip the fuck out when I put screw in the keyhole and it's stuck. I've got a thousand keys, but none can open this door. Go to the beach and wear a fedora, hipsters look at me like I'ma senora. That's spanish for misses. Wonder if Sadam has his 72 virgins and visited sodom and gomorrah? Plethora galore, the scent that wrecks the door, put lamblood on the entrance if you don't want the holy ghost to reach you, aura smoke beseach you, slowly roll a beatle, and ask if you want to smoke, the weed too. But, I don't, its psychoactive, my brains always in a slightly manic state of mind, the way I change and slant a rhyme, depicts the dyslexic that lives inside me. He's 32 years old and loves dog. Or himself. I don't know, cause if you look in the mirror, the redrum turns purple and my dog turns into a god. My ciphers are news stories, you should pay a subscription and in its depth, This is ancient egyptian cryptic text

[El Muffin]

lol..hipsters look at u like ur a senora

wot

but the sodom n gommorah part made me go Ungh

seen better from u but decent lil.flex here bb

good shit

[DexLabb]

fell asleep

[big baby]

@Certain next time dexx posts in my oms. I will get banned. do not

[UnbornBuddha]

This was quite humorous. My brother I am deeply fond of the way you word things. I admire your usage of olden locution. In other words, no pun intended, phraseology.
I do admit though you do go in a sort of tangents. It would be nice if you focused your lens, so to speak, on a more coherent theme as a whole. Not to say I do not appreciate this style. But it does jump a lot between a surfeit of topics abruptly. As if your in a haste to complete the rendition.
I am probably wrong, and my vision may be clouded. But I do see the value of the intertwining of the collective. This way there is no distinction between the forest and the tree. Although one will be able to see both with crystal clear clarity.
I am not disparaging and bashing the worth of what you have written. I am merely given a commentary that might not prove helpful.
But if it somehow does penetrate the veils of the will, set in its ways, I heed you to keep performing, but when you add the ingredients make sure they all harmonize within the decoction.
Your melodic poetry is at the stage of refinement, let it meld all together by ensuring concatenation as a whole. The proper firing time denotes an intention of knowing when to jest and not, when to go off track and not.
Your imagination is vivid, and you have a good sense and command of language. But do not get lost in the language. Be the one who wields the language, do not let the schemes, the rhymes, or certain literary obstacles be the sole star of the piece.
Every step along the way, every tool, are crucial to the unfolding of inner meaning. That is what this is vacuous in, inner meaning.
Although I can tell its satirical writing, the satire itself can be used to explore a deeper significance. And once you master this, then the heavens will open up for you because not only does lightheartedness grip the attention of the reader, but it also makes them listen because you made them physiologically and psychologically feel better.
The power that writing has is immense, a fact that I'm sure your well aware of. Use its power to guide others in and out of the labyrinth, not just into.
If I can give a comparison of satire with a purpose that is not just led by making others laugh. Then I will be hard pressed not to mention the stand up of the departed George Carlin, rest in peace, who gave his ideas on the structure of many things, mainly the wackiness of humanity. Although, I will with bias state that I think you can explore much more keenly what ravages the psyche, a force you obviously use to write in. Writers and poets can deliver messages that utterly transform another with different vehicles.
You can use your comedic twist to ease the ills of another's psyche, or to teach a certain something that you deem fit.

Thank you.

[DexLabb]

buddah dude i love u man. "guide others in and out of the labryinth, not just into" that shit is galactically golden

[PancakeBrah]

This was really good, obviously. In keeping with your known standard of writing. This was probably in the upper half? They're all kind of the same, which isn't meant to be an insult. The high level and sheer number of drops just kind of melds into one when I try to pinpoint specific high points. They all basically fall into braggadacio. Swag and flow with an intellectual/condescending bent. Like you're looking down on the reader and saying "try to top this, you can't look at the words and ideas idiyote." Wrote this 2 minutes 3 seconds including a coffee break. The 'flow' of your pieces are the strongest asset, that or the wording. Staccato text. Misdirections and runs of thought that most should be jealous of. Like mentioning 'lye' and then having the patience to go through 6-7 more ideas before referencing 'Fight Club'. The rhyming was strong, as well. You can take a starting point, a new line, and tendril out unlike most here in a unique way. You do that multiple times in a piece, often tying them together. That's why your drops are always a joy to read, this one in particular. Good job.

[Pharaohs Army]

The title/subject line of this makes me laugh whenever i see it.

in my opinion this is good but, from a few other things i've read of yours, it isn't quite as good as those. or godly shall we say lol. seriously though. good but not great (for your standards).

"put lamblood on the entrance if you don't want the holy ghost to reach you, aura smoke beseach you"
was my favorite rhyme in this1.. dope^