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faded
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![]() ![]() there's a bus route, and a path less wandered. deviate from routine & you leave unmasked, an impostor. a faker, a fraud, sure, you try to fit in- you cram in the pack and smack of antacid on blotter. hit to the lick. clap for the concert. fuck it. you brave through the walk, alone. you cuss & manage a laugh to calm nerves... the rustic path is abandoned, solo and awkward. it winds through the woods. wine-tips and good. you're feeling it now, weirdly cautiously proud- reminisce upon- father's corvette, a remembrance: steering rockets through town micromanage a perfect 4th of july. responsible now, work into coffers until die. so forget zero pressure, inaudible sentences, improper nouns- just the scent of December. proud of every present you found without fostering doubt. discovering Santa was built beneath a tree of misgivings, and guilt. my fake reads Art-Deku McFleeting. treble & loud. tremble & scrounge for reasons for living: well, i'm drawing a blank. perhaps existentialism's robbing a bank, and swiping a sack full of memories with no offering thanks. that's emptiness in a pause . the emptiness we applaud. the empty symphony hall that sinks that 'empty' in all, as we develop theories of meaning that barely compel me to stop. reading the walls with a candle in the belly of god, head towards the light- it's quite the conundrum. |
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faded
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ye ill leave 2 links too faded rn
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Razor-thin derision
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for reasons for living: well, i'm drawing a blank.
perhaps existentialism's robbing a bank, and swiping a sack full of memories with no offering thanks. that's emptiness in a pause . the emptiness we applaud. the empty symphony hall that sinks that 'empty' in all, as we develop theories of meaning that barely compel me to stop. reading the walls with a candle in the belly of god, head towards the light- it's quite the conundrum. ^This part was bananas. I can't tell who you're an alias of, it's a mixture of patrown and Split. If I'm wrong, I'm probably wayyy off. The literary language elements in this meshed effectively with the steam of consciousness method used here. I thought it was a good keystyle. Keep doing you |
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this rhyme was almost as cool as the image above it.
kidding; this was very good. thoroughly impressed. holy sh1t ^ |
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