Two fingers.

trap. · 07-06-2013, 02:19 PM

Me and her, incredible duo, but our feelings collapsed
I'm reeling in fact in spitting these indelible raps
I've managed to match the emotions I've suffered in life's struggle
Life's subtle but I write troubled, two rights in the wrong rebuttle
We've both had our past faults and now the silence is deafening
Mentioning how I'm questioning the love that lost everything.

So where to begin, from the point to where it all ends
I tried to pretend I didn't know your cheating ways again
The lies you suspend just ended up hurting me friend
And now we can't amend this, my heart just breaks and bends
Once you have a love lost two hearts can never manage
I ate the shit you fed me and still I remain famished
We made the same mistakes but you took it a step further
When I heard you fucked another man my mind became murdered
And yet still I sustained my purpose while you remained nervous
When your feelings resurfaced it was such a disdain disservice
From death's door the earth spins its axis and still you pretend
Now the earth revolves around you? Bitch, it'll never end
Still this stench lingers, a musky vapor of cum and hatred
How you took this brittle heart, tore it apart and raped it
Something that remains sacred is just nothing to you
How could we birth a baby boy that means NOTHING TO YOU?
That's something crazy boo, from your fucked up mind-state,
My mind hates. I made up my mind, you made the wrong mistake
I remember our last night, I slipped two fingers inside
Fake moaning uncontrollably, I couldn't let that shit slide
I took pride in the form of two and did away with you
The picture frames without you and now it's just another two
A father and son, separated at birth and divided by one
By one woman who took two lives, just for some fucking fun?
But now it's who enjoyment? Just me and the child
You took love's beautiful smile, turned it upside down and made it vile.

This story could go forever but I'll leave it at this
I'll never forget the good and bad times and I'll never be pissed
at the love we made and baby we created with the same
But still looking back on it you're the only one to blame
Sometimes I wished you dead and deceased but the drama decreased
So I'll leave you with two fingers in the symbol of peace.

Darth Yoda · 07-06-2013, 09:32 PM

Musk vapor of cum and hatred.

That's pretty disgusting! Literally.

Coup · 07-06-2013, 10:41 PM

pretty raw man. a woman has to be surely messed up to not be with her children...

Illume · 07-07-2013, 08:03 AM

The title kinda put me off a bit, I was thinkin' this was gonna be some 'look how many bitches I can get' crap. But it wasn't. I enjoyed the read and I know the feelin' man and it is crazy painful so kudos for lettin' that shit out in such an honest way.

Loved the symbolism and wordplay.

Particularly this section and these punches:

Once you have a love lost two hearts can never manage
I ate the shit you fed me and still I remain famished
We made the same mistakes but you took it a step further
When I heard you fucked another man my mind became murdered
And yet still I sustained my purpose while you remained nervous
When your feelings resurfaced it was such a disdain disservice
From death's door the earth spins its axis and still you pretend
Now the earth revolves around you? Bitch, it'll never end
Still this stench lingers, a musky vapor of cum and hatred
How you took this brittle heart, tore it apart and raped it
Something that remains sacred is just nothing to you
How could we birth a baby boy that means NOTHING TO YOU?

awesome spin on the general moaning complaints of a woman in the same position. Absolutely true and worded brilliantly.

Keep droppin'.

dead man · 07-07-2013, 11:48 AM

heavy handed. sounds like a trying time homie..this work held its power in its sense of straightforward truthfulness which is a stylistic rarity round these parts

take care man. keep looking forward..

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07-06-2013, 02:19 PM	#1
trap. Senior Citizen Join Date: Aug 1997 Posts: 3,870 Battle Record: 4-3 Rep Power: 0	Two fingers. Me and her, incredible duo, but our feelings collapsed I'm reeling in fact in spitting these indelible raps I've managed to match the emotions I've suffered in life's struggle Life's subtle but I write troubled, two rights in the wrong rebuttle We've both had our past faults and now the silence is deafening Mentioning how I'm questioning the love that lost everything. So where to begin, from the point to where it all ends I tried to pretend I didn't know your cheating ways again The lies you suspend just ended up hurting me friend And now we can't amend this, my heart just breaks and bends Once you have a love lost two hearts can never manage I ate the shit you fed me and still I remain famished We made the same mistakes but you took it a step further When I heard you fucked another man my mind became murdered And yet still I sustained my purpose while you remained nervous When your feelings resurfaced it was such a disdain disservice From death's door the earth spins its axis and still you pretend Now the earth revolves around you? Bitch, it'll never end Still this stench lingers, a musky vapor of cum and hatred How you took this brittle heart, tore it apart and raped it Something that remains sacred is just nothing to you How could we birth a baby boy that means NOTHING TO YOU? That's something crazy boo, from your fucked up mind-state, My mind hates. I made up my mind, you made the wrong mistake I remember our last night, I slipped two fingers inside Fake moaning uncontrollably, I couldn't let that shit slide I took pride in the form of two and did away with you The picture frames without you and now it's just another two A father and son, separated at birth and divided by one By one woman who took two lives, just for some fucking fun? But now it's who enjoyment? Just me and the child You took love's beautiful smile, turned it upside down and made it vile. This story could go forever but I'll leave it at this I'll never forget the good and bad times and I'll never be pissed at the love we made and baby we created with the same But still looking back on it you're the only one to blame Sometimes I wished you dead and deceased but the drama decreased So I'll leave you with two fingers in the symbol of peace.

07-06-2013, 10:41 PM	#3
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	pretty raw man. a woman has to be surely messed up to not be with her children... __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

07-07-2013, 11:48 AM	#5
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	heavy handed. sounds like a trying time homie..this work held its power in its sense of straightforward truthfulness which is a stylistic rarity round these parts take care man. keep looking forward.. 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president

07-06-2013, 09:32 PM	#2
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182439	Musk vapor of cum and hatred. That's pretty disgusting! Literally.

07-07-2013, 08:03 AM	#4
Illume Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 145 Rep Power: 671780	The title kinda put me off a bit, I was thinkin' this was gonna be some 'look how many bitches I can get' crap. But it wasn't. I enjoyed the read and I know the feelin' man and it is crazy painful so kudos for lettin' that shit out in such an honest way. Loved the symbolism and wordplay. Particularly this section and these punches: Once you have a love lost two hearts can never manage I ate the shit you fed me and still I remain famished We made the same mistakes but you took it a step further When I heard you fucked another man my mind became murdered And yet still I sustained my purpose while you remained nervous When your feelings resurfaced it was such a disdain disservice From death's door the earth spins its axis and still you pretend Now the earth revolves around you? Bitch, it'll never end Still this stench lingers, a musky vapor of cum and hatred How you took this brittle heart, tore it apart and raped it Something that remains sacred is just nothing to you *How could we birth a baby boy that means NOTHING TO YOU?* awesome spin on the general moaning complaints of a woman in the same position. Absolutely true and worded brilliantly. Keep droppin'.