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dull boy · 03-08-2014, 06:29 PM

Sexy suicide. I masturbate to my turmoil. Masking tape'll turn her loyal. I tie hearts in mental abuse. I'm not crazy, I just acknowledge shit, and am conscious in what you're 'too civil' to do. Dribble. That's all I scribble, it's true. Friends of mine think I'm getting simple... that, too. I watch the apathy wrap around my passion. Can't stop what's happening. Rapping's how I patch shit. Nah, nah... see... that shit's just not true. Poetry's finding holes in weak minds = you. I just stroll through these lines. Poke and read rhymes. Mostly define poo. HE SAID POO. That's wack. Dude is wack. He doesn't fit the mold we were told was phat. With a pee H. Like the black people say. Or Jaimie Kennedy. Or whatever new celebrity acts like token black guy. You're all stupid. We're all human. It's all useless. I see the future. I know I should enjoy the present. Can't avoid these lessons. Random ploys. Impressive. Panic poised. I'm stressing. Cannons pointed. Press 'em.

Read my thoughts. Articulate 'em entertainingly. Untangle what I've lost. Heart skipping dates. So bitter/vacant; me. Maybe he, should show a little bravery. None of you are real. Fakes patting each others backs. I'm in a grave, laughing 'cause no one lasts. I say phrases that summon gasps. In pain, waiting to come unclasped. Lung collapsed. BEAUTIFUL POIGNANT POETRY THAT TOUCHES SOFT SPOTS IN YOUR PUSSY FUCKING FEELINGS. You have a pussy. Must conceal it. Trust me, cut and peel it out your body. Be a zombie. Kill your mommy. Kill your parents.

Zen · 03-08-2014, 06:35 PM

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Originally Posted by dull boy

I liked this.

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=56620
:)

dull boy · 03-08-2014, 06:38 PM

I liked what you linked. It was kind of like what I'm thinking, but slightly less dreary in that you actually managed to say some decent rhymes. We are us.

Zen · 03-08-2014, 06:51 PM

<3

I'll be more dreary next time.

dull boy · 03-08-2014, 06:54 PM

How can you be so sure? Don't force drear.

Certain · 03-08-2014, 07:00 PM

You and dead man love writing about the Netcees.co Open Mic forum. This was unspectacular, but I liked the middle of the first section. I didn't like Malibu's Most Wanted but did like your nod to it.

dead man · 03-08-2014, 08:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Certain

You and dead man love writing about the Netcees.co Open Mic forum.

what?

Zen · 03-08-2014, 07:01 PM

Well, I'm feeling awfully dreary at the moment because I drank all my alcohol and don't feel like buying more because fuck doing stuff. I'll just get high instead.

dull boy · 03-08-2014, 07:17 PM

I stopped smoking for a bit. I had forgotten what being sober was like, and for a while it felt like being high when I wasn't. Then I started drinking, but stopped after a bad hangover. Now I smoke again, but in slightly more moderation. I miss the days when I was high on not being high, but that was fueled by some notion I had of doing noble and impactful work in the world lollllolololollllll Nah, it's not that funny, I just couldn't stop lol'ing once I'd begun. My bitch is on her way home and I'm not supposed to be smoking so that I can secure employment at some place that furthers my position in make believe social whatevers, I guess. I smoked was in the pipe. She's gonna get all preachy before she tokes up. I hate her.

Zen · 03-08-2014, 08:12 PM

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Originally Posted by dull boy

I stopped smoking for a bit. I had forgotten what being sober was like, and for a while it felt like being high when I wasn't. Then I started drinking, but stopped after a bad hangover. Now I smoke again, but in slightly more moderation. I miss the days when I was high on not being high, but that was fueled by some notion I had of doing noble and impactful work in the world lollllolololollllll Nah, it's not that funny, I just couldn't stop lol'ing once I'd begun. My bitch is on her way home and I'm not supposed to be smoking so that I can secure employment at some place that furthers my position in make believe social whatevers, I guess. I smoked was in the pipe. She's gonna get all preachy before she tokes up. I hate her.

Me too.

dull boy · 03-08-2014, 08:28 PM

He's saying we write about Netcees, but I think he kind of meant the audience... and if not, that's what he should have meant.

Hush · 03-08-2014, 08:35 PM

Salute

dead man · 03-08-2014, 08:42 PM

and idk man. you've been one of my favorites to read for some time, i have your metaphive archives bookmarked on my browser, but this pretentious 'more authentic than thou' attitude towards everybody and everything is sort of turning me off to your shit. its like you've pigeonholed yourself into this creative funk because you're unimpressed, uninspired and unhappy. i don't really care about you as a person because i don't know you but i do miss reading your more inspired rhyme work. maybe it was "less honest" because you weren't pointing out all the bullshit about the world all the time. but at least it was fun to read. and of course thats selfish to say because I'm commenting purely as a consumer. but I'm also someone who uses this place as a conduit for negative emotions and neuroticism so i vaguely understand why you feel the need to do the same. I'm not telling you to stop writing what you want to write about, ill always take a moment read what you have to say, I'm just giving you an honest opinion. take it how you will.

dull boy · 03-08-2014, 09:11 PM

Not certain I've ever had a more honest and appreciated response. I agree with you wholeheartedly. I'm rejecting the natural ways of appreciation, I guess. People like what we write because we make insights pop. It annoys me. I am unimpressed, uninspired and unhappy lol It eats me up, believe me. I'd write about why, but I guess I'll have to get over my lack of inspiration to write inspired before I can lol

Sick · 03-09-2014, 09:08 AM

Salute

lol'd @ masturbate to my turmoil

Haha wtf

Natural · 03-09-2014, 12:36 PM

What's really funny is people actually Dick ride this paragraph form spew of half abstract ideas and half filler. This shit would never fit in sync with a beat and it doesn't come close to embodying anything near core hip hop. Its people like you...vulger....pancake....baby...bwhaha who make text a truely alianated art form. When it should just be a small variation of real rap(audio).
You have some clever shit sometimes, I'm nobody to say you don't...
but these flashes of brilliance you have get way too much publicity.

I don't know a lot of text sites left today that would consider this dope.
I'm sure you'll hate on this opinion, but deep down you know I'm the truth.

dull boy · 03-09-2014, 12:41 PM

lol

Coup · 03-09-2014, 12:42 PM

idk, this type of down-and-out, only-I-understand-the-world and I'm-super-unique style is not original, it's lazy and ironic that instead of being insightful and astute, it's the opposite really. Show it, don't say it.

Natural · 03-09-2014, 12:43 PM

Lol, indeed.

Hush · 03-09-2014, 12:53 PM

See Dull

That's a true backpacker

Amongst even them u are alienated

03-08-2014, 06:29 PM	#1
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	YOU must enter a title subject Sexy suicide. I masturbate to my turmoil. Masking tape'll turn her loyal. I tie hearts in mental abuse. I'm not crazy, I just acknowledge shit, and am conscious in what you're 'too civil' to do. Dribble. That's all I scribble, it's true. Friends of mine think I'm getting simple... that, too. I watch the apathy wrap around my passion. Can't stop what's happening. Rapping's how I patch shit. Nah, nah... see... that shit's just not true. Poetry's finding holes in weak minds = you. I just stroll through these lines. Poke and read rhymes. Mostly define poo. HE SAID POO. That's wack. Dude is wack. He doesn't fit the mold we were told was phat. With a pee H. Like the black people say. Or Jaimie Kennedy. Or whatever new celebrity acts like token black guy. You're all stupid. We're all human. It's all useless. I see the future. I know I should enjoy the present. Can't avoid these lessons. Random ploys. Impressive. Panic poised. I'm stressing. Cannons pointed. Press 'em. Read my thoughts. Articulate 'em entertainingly. Untangle what I've lost. Heart skipping dates. So bitter/vacant; me. Maybe he, should show a little bravery. None of you are real. Fakes patting each others backs. I'm in a grave, laughing 'cause no one lasts. I say phrases that summon gasps. In pain, waiting to come unclasped. Lung collapsed. BEAUTIFUL POIGNANT POETRY THAT TOUCHES SOFT SPOTS IN YOUR PUSSY FUCKING FEELINGS. You have a pussy. Must conceal it. Trust me, cut and peel it out your body. Be a zombie. Kill your mommy. Kill your parents.

03-08-2014, 08:35 PM	#12
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,036 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181420	Salute __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk

03-08-2014, 08:42 PM	#13
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	and idk man. you've been one of my favorites to read for some time, i have your metaphive archives bookmarked on my browser, but this pretentious 'more authentic than thou' attitude towards everybody and everything is sort of turning me off to your shit. its like you've pigeonholed yourself into this creative funk because you're unimpressed, uninspired and unhappy. i don't really care about you as a person because i don't know you but i do miss reading your more inspired rhyme work. maybe it was "less honest" because you weren't pointing out all the bullshit about the world all the time. but at least it was fun to read. and of course thats selfish to say because I'm commenting purely as a consumer. but I'm also someone who uses this place as a conduit for negative emotions and neuroticism so i vaguely understand why you feel the need to do the same. I'm not telling you to stop writing what you want to write about, ill always take a moment read what you have to say, I'm just giving you an honest opinion. take it how you will. __________________ Zack Wicks for president

03-08-2014, 09:11 PM	#14
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	Not certain I've ever had a more honest and appreciated response. I agree with you wholeheartedly. I'm rejecting the natural ways of appreciation, I guess. People like what we write because we make insights pop. It annoys me. I am unimpressed, uninspired and unhappy lol It eats me up, believe me. I'd write about why, but I guess I'll have to get over my lack of inspiration to write inspired before I can lol Last edited by dull boy; 03-08-2014 at 09:17 PM.

03-09-2014, 09:08 AM	#15
Sick t00 0riginal 4 u Join Date: Jun 2013 Location: Just Write's mother's house Posts: 1,042 Battle Record: 7-1 Rep Power: 1837334	Salute lol'd @ masturbate to my turmoil Haha wtf Last edited by Sick; 03-09-2014 at 09:11 AM.

03-08-2014, 06:38 PM	#3
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	I liked what you linked. It was kind of like what I'm thinking, but slightly less dreary in that you actually managed to say some decent rhymes. We are us.

03-08-2014, 06:51 PM	#4
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	<3 I'll be more dreary next time.

03-08-2014, 06:54 PM	#5
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	How can you be so sure? Don't force drear.

03-08-2014, 07:00 PM	#6
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	You and dead man love writing about the Netcees.co Open Mic forum. This was unspectacular, but I liked the middle of the first section. I didn't like Malibu's Most Wanted but did like your nod to it.

03-08-2014, 07:01 PM	#8
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Well, I'm feeling awfully dreary at the moment because I drank all my alcohol and don't feel like buying more because fuck doing stuff. I'll just get high instead.

03-08-2014, 07:17 PM	#9
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	I stopped smoking for a bit. I had forgotten what being sober was like, and for a while it felt like being high when I wasn't. Then I started drinking, but stopped after a bad hangover. Now I smoke again, but in slightly more moderation. I miss the days when I was high on not being high, but that was fueled by some notion I had of doing noble and impactful work in the world lollllolololollllll Nah, it's not that funny, I just couldn't stop lol'ing once I'd begun. My bitch is on her way home and I'm not supposed to be smoking so that I can secure employment at some place that furthers my position in make believe social whatevers, I guess. I smoked was in the pipe. She's gonna get all preachy before she tokes up. I hate her.

03-08-2014, 08:28 PM	#11
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	He's saying we write about Netcees, but I think he kind of meant the audience... and if not, that's what he should have meant.

03-09-2014, 12:36 PM	#16
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	What's really funny is people actually Dick ride this paragraph form spew of half abstract ideas and half filler. This shit would never fit in sync with a beat and it doesn't come close to embodying anything near core hip hop. Its people like you...vulger....pancake....baby...bwhaha who make text a truely alianated art form. When it should just be a small variation of real rap(audio). You have some clever shit sometimes, I'm nobody to say you don't... but these flashes of brilliance you have get way too much publicity. I don't know a lot of text sites left today that would consider this dope. I'm sure you'll hate on this opinion, but deep down you know I'm the truth.

03-09-2014, 12:41 PM	#17
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	lol

03-09-2014, 12:42 PM	#18
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	idk, this type of down-and-out, only-I-understand-the-world and I'm-super-unique style is not original, it's lazy and ironic that instead of being insightful and astute, it's the opposite really. Show it, don't say it.

03-09-2014, 12:43 PM	#19
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	Lol, indeed.

03-09-2014, 12:53 PM	#20
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,036 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181420	See Dull That's a true backpacker Amongst even them u are alienated __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk