Just some personal shit, fucking around.

[WZA]

just wrote the first shit that came to mind, haha. love it or hate it, idgaf.

Ever since birth, i've been over par,
Clever with words, producing golden bars,
Through endeavors i've learned that hoping scars,

Shattered to pieces, that's life,
Asking for Jesus, trying to grasp the light,
It's hard to breathe when you're trapped inside,

My son, is what keeps me here,
I've run my whole life from seeing clear,

It takes quite a few, before I can cope,
Always thinking what I might do, than I grab the rope,

Easy way out, but whose looking?,
I'm like a star fading out, no more juices cooking,

I feel like dudes in Brooklyn,
No easy way out,
these aint the shoes I choosed to live in,

Mom wasn't an influence, she taught me what not to be,
Should I set sail like a cruise ship into the Autumn breeze?,

[Brenn]

the flow was off a bit here and you didn't have any depth either.... i would work on wordplay and structure.. look into syllable structuring when forming your bars and you'll be fine.