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Void · 03-21-2013, 11:26 AM

Alien senses. Acting crazy defensive. Just a mechanism to not be phased by horrendous fates I envision or am placed in. Indifferent. Every change is a divot in my plain of existence. No way I'm upended by the sways of momentum that wave through the system. Bathe in the endless taking and givin'. Take a blade to the infant. Rape all the women. Say it while grinnin'. Play with the victims of heinous attrition. Semi-demented. Lunacy is fun. I'ma strip this loose screw 'til you can see its nuts. I'ma strip the skin from strippers 'til you can see their guts. I blew a fuse. Screw is loose. Help is required. Hell is inside us. I fell in the fire. Melting my wires. Running a blade down the front of your face. Choking your puppy 'til its stomach won't raise. Nothing is hate. Love's gonna fade. Emotions are circuits. Most of 'em worthless. I only label my acts so you can relate to the tag. Strange? What is that?

Brian Bryan · 03-21-2013, 11:33 AM

why everyone swagger jacking lars steez all of a sudden?

Wise Wiggles · 03-21-2013, 11:47 AM

^ are you new here? silence over bullshit, sonny.

like the eyedea title.

Will read at lunch.

Edit: read, and sick.

Void · 03-21-2013, 11:49 AM

Do you mean to tell me that rhyming streams of apathetic, morbid consciousness is a style you think one person owns, or came up with? Assume there's more to existence than what you are aware of, and stop making an ass of yourself to those who know better.

PancakeBrah · 03-21-2013, 08:33 PM

I'ma strip this loose screw 'til you can see its nuts.

fatality.

This was more raw/direct than usual. Still lovely. I think I like your more personal/"emo" pieces more. Although this wasn't purely aggressive, to say.

editz lolololooolikn

I think the fact you use paragraph style helps your style. When you read paragraph style you read it as sentences and the soft rhymes just hit you and the switchbacks seem so much more dope. Whereas your line by line pieces are just as dope, but sometimes glancing readers or people just feeding to feed don't catch the dopeness. Real perfect mesh of styles and format. I haven't been around forever but from context clues I know you've basically been using this style forever, and you can tell. Sometimes I read your paragraph shits and double back two or three times to catch all the rhymes. It's clever and a nice format vs. form debate starter.

Also your period placement/grammar usage is top notches.

Running a blade down the front of your face.

^well worded. struck me as i read it.

Just Write · 05-31-2013, 12:50 PM

stopped reading after Take a blade to the infant. Rape all the women

I don't condone

CopyPat · 06-10-2013, 01:06 AM

^lol

People need to be reading these!! UP

Coup · 06-10-2013, 01:09 AM

I fell in the fire. Melting my wires.

Liked

Coup · 06-10-2013, 01:14 AM

lars don't own jack #*#*@. I've been writing in this format since I've started rhyming, before I learned more traditional delivery. Apparently void does too. SMH at the bubble yall live in.

Vulgar · 06-10-2013, 01:39 AM

This was butter. I read this without forks in the road, like a squeegee on a lubricated highway. I raced. Down it. Yeah.

Keep doing you

ill nik-A · 06-13-2013, 07:09 AM

This is the guy talking crap... Near rhyme multis, going for raw takes though just love taps, not a fan of a piece with mediocre substance carried by a flow that is just ok, formatting is fucked

Not a fan... Fillet filler and more filler

Wise Wiggles · 06-13-2013, 07:46 AM

^ Pot calling a brand new chrome kettle black

ill nik-A · 06-13-2013, 08:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Whys Ways

^ Pot calling a brand new chrome kettle black

Nah I'm better than both of u

Geno · 06-13-2013, 07:52 AM

Void da god though tbh.

Wise Wiggles · 06-13-2013, 10:13 AM

How much wine you had today big guy?

ill nik-A · 06-13-2013, 12:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Whys Ways

How much wine you had today big guy?

Accept the pink slip

Any kinda battle fagg0t

Void · 06-13-2013, 01:17 PM

Are you 16, or just stupid?

ill nik-A · 06-13-2013, 01:25 PM

Are u wack or just jealous?

Void · 06-13-2013, 02:52 PM

Why would I be jealous of someone I think is either 16 or stupid? I think you've answered my question, but I guess it could be both. Wack or jealous. That's on par with the 'disses' in that verse you wrote. Hof material, son. I see now why you're held in such high regard. So confident you felt the need to come to this thread and comment because I called you average.

#insecurebutthurtinfant

03-21-2013, 11:26 AM	#1
Void Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 221 Rep Power: 0	sososososocliche Alien senses. Acting crazy defensive. Just a mechanism to not be phased by horrendous fates I envision or am placed in. Indifferent. Every change is a divot in my plain of existence. No way I'm upended by the sways of momentum that wave through the system. Bathe in the endless taking and givin'. Take a blade to the infant. Rape all the women. Say it while grinnin'. Play with the victims of heinous attrition. Semi-demented. Lunacy is fun. I'ma strip this loose screw 'til you can see its nuts. I'ma strip the skin from strippers 'til you can see their guts. I blew a fuse. Screw is loose. Help is required. Hell is inside us. I fell in the fire. Melting my wires. Running a blade down the front of your face. Choking your puppy 'til its stomach won't raise. Nothing is hate. Love's gonna fade. Emotions are circuits. Most of 'em worthless. I only label my acts so you can relate to the tag. Strange? What is that?

03-21-2013, 11:47 AM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	^ are you new here? silence over bullshit, sonny. like the eyedea title. Will read at lunch. Edit: read, and sick. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

03-21-2013, 08:33 PM	#5
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	I'ma strip this loose screw 'til you can see its nuts. fatality. This was more raw/direct than usual. Still lovely. I think I like your more personal/"emo" pieces more. Although this wasn't purely aggressive, to say. editz lolololooolikn I think the fact you use paragraph style helps your style. When you read paragraph style you read it as sentences and the soft rhymes just hit you and the switchbacks seem so much more dope. Whereas your line by line pieces are just as dope, but sometimes glancing readers or people just feeding to feed don't catch the dopeness. Real perfect mesh of styles and format. I haven't been around forever but from context clues I know you've basically been using this style forever, and you can tell. Sometimes I read your paragraph shits and double back two or three times to catch all the rhymes. It's clever and a nice format vs. form debate starter. Also your period placement/grammar usage is top notches. Running a blade down the front of your face. ^well worded. struck me as i read it. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

05-31-2013, 12:50 PM	#6
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	stopped reading after Take a blade to the infant. Rape all the women I don't condone __________________

06-10-2013, 01:09 AM	#8
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	I fell in the fire. Melting my wires. Liked __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

03-21-2013, 11:33 AM	#2
Brian Bryan BITER Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: England Posts: 620 Battle Record: 4-0 Champed - Gimmick Battle League Rep Power: 0	why everyone swagger jacking lars steez all of a sudden?

03-21-2013, 11:49 AM	#4
Void Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 221 Rep Power: 0	Do you mean to tell me that rhyming streams of apathetic, morbid consciousness is a style you think one person owns, or came up with? Assume there's more to existence than what you are aware of, and stop making an ass of yourself to those who know better.

06-10-2013, 01:06 AM	#7
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	^lol People need to be reading these!! UP

06-10-2013, 01:14 AM	#9
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	lars don't own jack ##@. I've been writing in this format since I've started rhyming, before I learned more traditional delivery. Apparently void does too. SMH at the bubble yall live in. __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

06-10-2013, 01:39 AM	#10
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	This was butter. I read this without forks in the road, like a squeegee on a lubricated highway. I raced. Down it. Yeah. Keep doing you

06-13-2013, 07:09 AM	#11
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	This is the guy talking crap... Near rhyme multis, going for raw takes though just love taps, not a fan of a piece with mediocre substance carried by a flow that is just ok, formatting is fucked Not a fan... Fillet filler and more filler __________________ Grumpy old man.

06-13-2013, 07:46 AM	#12
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	^ Pot calling a brand new chrome kettle black __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

06-13-2013, 07:52 AM	#14
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Void da god though tbh. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

06-13-2013, 10:13 AM	#15
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	How much wine you had today big guy? __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

06-13-2013, 01:17 PM	#17
Void Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 221 Rep Power: 0	Are you 16, or just stupid?

06-13-2013, 01:25 PM	#18
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,420 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164519	Are u wack or just jealous? __________________ Grumpy old man.

06-13-2013, 02:52 PM	#19
Void Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 221 Rep Power: 0	Why would I be jealous of someone I think is either 16 or stupid? I think you've answered my question, but I guess it could be both. Wack or jealous. That's on par with the 'disses' in that verse you wrote. Hof material, son. I see now why you're held in such high regard. So confident you felt the need to come to this thread and comment because I called you average. #insecurebutthurtinfant