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The all sick flow-er like fallopian tubes
The long stick grower like Pinocchio do I drop scripts bolder than the fonts in the news That ya’ll trip over like ya poppin some shrooms Yes I’m talkin to you, this incredibly simple Never Doctor the truth, I ain’t Gregory Chrystal The melody grips you as my rhythms commence And allegedly sick dudes consider it fresh The king of this text shit, sick as asbestos But you kiddies expect it, so it didn’t get credit Got meticulous methods, and continuous edits And I’m bringin the heaviest lyrical evidence Mineral sediments is how much you rockin Ain’t enough considerable elements to drown out ya talkin So count down the coffins, cause rappers get snuffed Just bow wow, ya dogshit is crackin me up I been absent a second but I'm back with a vengeance, with immaculate texting, and still the most massive of testes...bro. I'm actually defly dope, just casually wetting flows, while I'm gradually getting stoned, magically...head explodes! Better cancel the wedding pose because i done had every sexy ho, scantily clad and just getting boned on my mattress during the matri's and monial's. the master of ceremonies, master of Sarah moaning, commanding her pheromones until she badly needs serotonin. *fucked'er brains out* The best rapper in the territory... cause fuck the states rout. American Horror Story when I come from way south. I'm an arrogant very horny fuckin James Brown, on some various very hypnotic funky train sound.. haha. Wrote the first part, and basically keyed the second part for a cypher
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I'm happy to have you back. The opening segment was an immaculate example of your style, while the Untitled cypher part was very good. I initially was thrown off by "fonts" not having the hard O, but when I realized what you did, it worked. I loved the first six lines. The rest was good, though "Mineral sediments is how much you rockin" was clunkier than the rest simply because it didn't make sense.
(And I typed this so quickly because I'd read the cypher part already.)
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haha thx Cert. the mineral sediments means minimal excellence
when comparing it to rocks, they barely did it..soft
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gregory chrystal line made me chuckle. matri and monials, master of ceremonials scheme was fire.
great as always man, good to see you back round these parts.
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Yeah the Rawn like was kewl.
Liked the sarah moaning/serotonin shit. Multi-syllable rhyme schemes were there like they ever were. Did not enjoy your bashing of my country tho. Retaliation is eminent.. Props on your mini-return loc'.
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"the master of ceremonies, master of Sarah moaning, commanding her pheromones until she badly needs serotonin. "
commanding her pheromones. Could be line of the month. |
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I liked both sections for different reasons...thought the first half was more your usual style especially flow wise and the second part I was feelin' the content as it came across as just raw imo.What others have quoted would be my favorites but as a whole it's mighty slick Pat...good to see you back in here man.
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Copy.
No disrespect intended. I'ma keep it real though. I think over the past 3 years you have done a good job at mastering a steeze. You can certainly use multi syllable rhymes and you're rhyming ability is top notch when you so choose to put in that extra effort. Props. However I'm seeing nothing really different from you drop to drop. It's always the same repetitive multi filled braggodocio. I myself am guilty of over doing brag(my next drop is brag lol).... But two wrongs don't make a right. I'd like to see you play more with wordplay....metaphors and punch lines than ya multi's. I've seen copypat and his multi's. Show all of you're prowess and really work hard to elevate dude.. Look at eminem for example Regardless if you enjoy his work or not it's indisputable that he is a success And he has changed up his style consistantly...and mastering each of them A jack of all trades to speak. Take note This type of work ethic can be applied to text. You're dope....and what's here is smooth bro....but it's Imho a played style To me You're dopest work has came when collabing with wise ways So I'm not at all saying what you do is whack Just trying to get you to spice things up. No hate. Stay up |
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This was dope pat. You're probavly the most rhythmic fluid rapprr on here and have the smoothest text flow but i gotta agree with nat. While its always dope i want to see you venture out and do something none of us would expect... write a topical or sumn bro lol. I always look for and enjoy your reads but show me what you got
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CopyPat's dropped at least four single-topic, non-braggadocio verses since I've been here. Why does everyone say this to him but not others?
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Perhaps I overlooked it. In any case I've actually said similar things to genocide and ages ago wise ways. At the end of the day though they don't have to listen to me. Effects me none. Just giving my two cents. |
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This needs audio asap. Well written and spilled out the mouth perfectly. No real flaws.
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