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Old 08-29-2013, 09:12 PM   #1
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Default My fucked up life. Part 1


Fuckin obnoxious and nauseous.
Slap my bitch in the face for being cautious.
Cunt, im awake...

Grab that fucking steak off the plate she made specifically for this day of date.
3 lines in the shape of 'didas tubesox.
Bumpin yonkers till the dome rocks bumpin coke lines till my dome rocks.
Consecutive.

Hop outa bed, get ready for what she said I forget but condescend.
Put on my flip flops and brotank but forget im gettin head by a nappy headed dreaded overzealous wench salty breaded 2 faced 2 lipped daughter of the dead.
Ya heard what I said.
Now take a step back while I bust mah head.

Walk out my room to find a homie halfway half-dead in the hall-way.
I look around and find the walls strange,
no color, happy pictures arranged.
I turn the bitch to find shes out of range.
sigh* continued the pathway.
To find a bitch look at me like Anne Hathaway.
Throw the nearest object ask if she in my hallway.
"Yes?"
Then procede to say it wasnt a question it's ballplay.
That's game...
"No I hate this game"
I dont care, what I look like a carebear?
fureal....
Nose flared and cocked stare as I fuck this bitches face while she stands there.
"COME HERE!"
Im downright, antisocial.
Asked a post office if bugs and maggots were express postal.
Now im not aloud coastal.
Bodies are just to personal.
I guess.
Anyways, Im waiting on the fucking bitches appetite.
Im waiting, out of dead silence called it a hermaphrodite...
Ya bitch Im asking for a fight.
Hurry and make food or im leaving for the night.
"Why?"
To fuck bitches and get that money, you think thats funny? I slapped her so hard my nose was running. Got pissed and told her to fix her eye, before she dies to colored dyes going down her throat like it was suicide.
Date me, it's suicide;
literal.
Just found out it was an anniversary for the second year at cock university. I already chopped her up, now how am I suppose to bust my nuts.. Look at the body mangled, yeah that's just fucked up.
Cause I cant...


To be continued.

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Old 08-29-2013, 11:41 PM   #2
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This was pretty much horrible.
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Old 08-29-2013, 11:41 PM   #3
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crazy shit

liked certain aspects of this

the name drops, raw-ness.. refreshing honesty imo

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Old 08-29-2013, 11:46 PM   #4
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lol was trying to be kind of unforgivable funny but rap it and story tell. Looks like im not a comedian anymore
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Old 08-30-2013, 01:00 AM   #5
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i didn't like your rhymes one bit. content was Ok
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Old 09-01-2013, 10:28 AM   #6
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not bad. flow was hard to catch, and there wasn't anything particularly stand-out about it. but there were a couple of good things about it too, like how you chose your angle from the get-go and stayed with it, which gave it consistency and you attempted a story, somewhat successfully. seen better, seen worse. keep at it.
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