Raised by Albanians

Objective · 03-06-2020, 06:36 AM

I don't like any of this now. It's just wrong and not rooted in reality. Anger, frustration and feeling left out of a culture that you so strongly want to be a part of can turn to disdain. And that's what this was. Knowledge, however, has the ability to change minds

dead man · 03-06-2020, 09:38 PM

we all know that albanians can be some hard motherfuckers

this was kind of a wild ride through an adolescent world of crime he didn't understand, but became a piece of by design.

cavalry's rook for the two headed eagle,
black, red and a wholesome emotion for evil.

visceral image. the double headed eagle is a universal power symbol. black and red are in turn emotionally charged, powerful colors. i'd be interested in the context cause i'm unfamiliar.

had to look up "shqipe" to see where you were coming from. interesting for sure.

i know you were just in america for a decent amount of time. good to see you're seeing the world and obviously transcended the negative aspects of the culture you bloomed in. admirable and fascinating to see this side of you.

hope all is well.

thanks

Objective · 03-07-2020, 12:11 PM

I've grown up and matured. Some things are meant to be private, and there's a lot of misconceptions I didn't know before that I know now. I originally wrote this to understand myself and a part I've been told by others. After having spent time in Albania, met people and so on I'm ashamed by what I've written.

Exis · 03-06-2020, 10:18 PM

Sorry for not gettin' to this earlier, just not in the right head space atm...I promise to drop feed when I can, My bad.

Exis · 03-18-2020, 11:01 PM

You have this ability to really get across imagery in a very resonate way, You not only paint pictures with words you totally fuck with the canvas...This was a emotional trip, Minus the acid...This was a great read bro.

Stay upwards, Sorry for the delayed feed.

Universe · 03-19-2020, 04:33 PM

This was good man. Your stuff is solid, but I feel you put more time and energy into explaining yourself afterwards than into the actual piece. I think you have a lot to offer just you need to get it across a little better. (I'm only nitpicking with you cuz you have tons of potential.) You obviously have a voice and are passionate... but let me FEEL it. Takes the reigns off of yourself. I want to see Objective Unchained. Bring it.

You're like a mini dead man junior... in training lol. That's a huge compliment. Keep it up.

Eŋg · 03-24-2020, 01:46 PM

i was pretty sweet on this albanian girl once. or she was kosovan idk. girl was a dancer. body was stupid.

this was sophomoric btw but writing with emotional content is a plus.

don't think, feel.

Vulgar · 03-27-2020, 08:06 PM

Advanced minds that profit from lethal salaries, crooks
with illegal weaponry shootin up woods, inviting me too,
cavalry's rook for the two headed eagle,
black, red and a wholesome emotion for evil.

Can you talk more about advanced minds? I'm terrible at math so my business chops are very limited. I liked the images invoked, maybe it's just when I hear a European country, my eyes light up because the history is so steep and the people live differently. Thanks for the read. This could be a stage where nostalgia and reflection are helping you repair old wounds or recover a distant frame of mind that still has some lesson to give.

Objective · 03-30-2020, 10:10 PM

Appreciate everyone's honest feed! It has given me a lot to ponder and think about. Thanks!

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Originally Posted by Vulgar

Can you talk more about advanced minds? I'm terrible at math so my business chops are very limited.

Ye, idk if it's like what I'm about to tell other places around the globe but from what I've heard from people in Norway/Nordic region, and my father (as he's been meddling too), is that Albanians have a rep for being calm, smart and crazy but collected (not everyone, obviously, there's quite a few straight up stupid ones too). Due to this they're sometimes used to meddle in situations between gangs as a neutral third part. They're hard but only got recent historical issues with Serbs and that helps in terms of Pakistanis vs Turks, they're also white looking so accepted by most Russians/slavs and whites in general but not white enough to not be accepted as outsiders of society by people of color. I find it all weird and interesting. That said, when it comes to pure racism (white or black) I'm not accepted by anyone and have experienced that aspect too, lol.

Adverse · 03-30-2020, 07:31 PM

I liked this piece and liked how you went out of your way to make the statement "I'm not hood just from a different reality" because to those of us that have lived a pampered lifestyle the things you're describing are just a staple in many cultures in different countries so it was cool to get that outside perspective in my eyes. Thought the piece itself wasn't super stylistic but it didn't need to be it got it's point across clearly and i enjoyed it a lot. Keep writing my dude

03-06-2020, 06:36 AM	#1
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Raised by Albanians I don't like any of this now. It's just wrong and not rooted in reality. Anger, frustration and feeling left out of a culture that you so strongly want to be a part of can turn to disdain. And that's what this was. Knowledge, however, has the ability to change minds __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o Last edited by Objective; 03-24-2025 at 07:38 PM.

03-06-2020, 09:38 PM	#2
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	we all know that albanians can be some hard motherfuckers this was kind of a wild ride through an adolescent world of crime he didn't understand, but became a piece of by design. cavalry's rook for the two headed eagle, black, red and a wholesome emotion for evil. visceral image. the double headed eagle is a universal power symbol. black and red are in turn emotionally charged, powerful colors. i'd be interested in the context cause i'm unfamiliar. had to look up "shqipe" to see where you were coming from. interesting for sure. i know you were just in america for a decent amount of time. good to see you're seeing the world and obviously transcended the negative aspects of the culture you bloomed in. admirable and fascinating to see this side of you. hope all is well. thanks __________________ Zack Wicks for president

03-07-2020, 12:11 PM	#3
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	I've grown up and matured. Some things are meant to be private, and there's a lot of misconceptions I didn't know before that I know now. I originally wrote this to understand myself and a part I've been told by others. After having spent time in Albania, met people and so on I'm ashamed by what I've written. __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o Last edited by Objective; 03-24-2025 at 07:35 PM.

03-19-2020, 04:33 PM	#6
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	This was good man. Your stuff is solid, but I feel you put more time and energy into explaining yourself afterwards than into the actual piece. I think you have a lot to offer just you need to get it across a little better. (I'm only nitpicking with you cuz you have tons of potential.) You obviously have a voice and are passionate... but let me FEEL it. Takes the reigns off of yourself. I want to see Objective Unchained. Bring it. You're like a mini dead man junior... in training lol. That's a huge compliment. Keep it up. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..

03-06-2020, 10:18 PM	#4
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Sorry for not gettin' to this earlier, just not in the right head space atm...I promise to drop feed when I can, My bad.

03-18-2020, 11:01 PM	#5
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	You have this ability to really get across imagery in a very resonate way, You not only paint pictures with words you totally fuck with the canvas...This was a emotional trip, Minus the acid...This was a great read bro. Stay upwards, Sorry for the delayed feed.

03-24-2020, 01:46 PM	#7
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	i was pretty sweet on this albanian girl once. or she was kosovan idk. girl was a dancer. body was stupid. this was sophomoric btw but writing with emotional content is a plus. don't think, feel.

03-27-2020, 08:06 PM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Advanced minds that profit from lethal salaries, crooks with illegal weaponry shootin up woods, inviting me too, cavalry's rook for the two headed eagle, black, red and a wholesome emotion for evil. Can you talk more about advanced minds? I'm terrible at math so my business chops are very limited. I liked the images invoked, maybe it's just when I hear a European country, my eyes light up because the history is so steep and the people live differently. Thanks for the read. This could be a stage where nostalgia and reflection are helping you repair old wounds or recover a distant frame of mind that still has some lesson to give.

03-30-2020, 07:31 PM	#10
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	I liked this piece and liked how you went out of your way to make the statement "I'm not hood just from a different reality" because to those of us that have lived a pampered lifestyle the things you're describing are just a staple in many cultures in different countries so it was cool to get that outside perspective in my eyes. Thought the piece itself wasn't super stylistic but it didn't need to be it got it's point across clearly and i enjoyed it a lot. Keep writing my dude