Gulielmus Occamus

neutral · 12-08-2015, 04:40 PM

100% compensation

neutral · 12-20-2015, 07:56 PM

I sat still for three days.

neutral · 01-01-2016, 08:47 PM

UnbornBuddha · 01-06-2016, 12:29 AM

I like the ideas presented. Albeit, it tends to be too long winded for my tastes. By long winded I don't mean the length. But, the actual sentences go on forever, and the rhymes to me seem a bit sporadic. The content itself is enjoyable because its unique. You clearly have your own style which defines you. I see you joined in 2013, but its the first time I've read something from you, and I've been pretty active this past year. Hone your thoughts, so they are more poignant and therefore more impactful.
It's also difficult for me to assess your writing based off one written. I mean I can, but I would like to see others. And then I can really see what are the patterns: what is the voice you like to take on, what is the content you like to delve into, and to see which are your strong suits and the weaknesses we all have. Write more!

12-08-2015, 04:40 PM	#1
neutral Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 52 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 3412709	Gulielmus Occamus 100% compensation Last edited by neutral; 01-04-2018 at 11:47 PM.

12-20-2015, 07:56 PM	#2
neutral Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 52 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 3412709	I sat still for three days.

01-01-2016, 08:47 PM	#3
neutral Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 52 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 3412709

01-06-2016, 12:29 AM	#4
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	I like the ideas presented. Albeit, it tends to be too long winded for my tastes. By long winded I don't mean the length. But, the actual sentences go on forever, and the rhymes to me seem a bit sporadic. The content itself is enjoyable because its unique. You clearly have your own style which defines you. I see you joined in 2013, but its the first time I've read something from you, and I've been pretty active this past year. Hone your thoughts, so they are more poignant and therefore more impactful. It's also difficult for me to assess your writing based off one written. I mean I can, but I would like to see others. And then I can really see what are the patterns: what is the voice you like to take on, what is the content you like to delve into, and to see which are your strong suits and the weaknesses we all have. Write more!